The Secret Dancer is the screenplay I wrote as part of Stage 32 November 2015 thirty day write challenge and here's the logline above . The screenplay is in its first draft, but as soon as I get the revisions done, I will upload it.

Sounds like a great story in the works. You might want to rearrange the logline for clarity and brevity. Out of desperation to help his mother with mounting bills and his sick father, an innocent 19-year-old high school student, enticed by a devious co-worker, becomes a strip dancer at a gay club; but there's more than just dancing going on at the club. I don't know where you will be taking it. You might want one more sentence the poses the central question. I really enjoyed participating with you in the November Write Club.

Thanks for taking the time Robert. Your suggestions mean a lot to me and are right on point. Thanks, buddy.