I think your logline needs some work. I suggest getting rid of "Guess they forgot he was the best for a reason." I think that'd be better in the pitch.
Here's a logline suggestion, but some of it might not match your story since I don't know it: "When the worlds' most prolific assassin is placed on injured reserve, the organization's cost-cutting measures nearly kill him. Armed with nothing, he tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/etc. _______ (goal of story) so/in order to ________ (stakes)."
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Great title, Chad Ayinde! :D
I think your logline needs some work. I suggest getting rid of "Guess they forgot he was the best for a reason." I think that'd be better in the pitch.
Here's a logline suggestion, but some of it might not match your story since I don't know it: "When the worlds' most prolific assassin is placed on injured reserve, the organization's cost-cutting measures nearly kill him. Armed with nothing, he tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/etc. _______ (goal of story) so/in order to ________ (stakes)."
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