Page 9 - Four Panels
(Ch2 Pg9 Panel-One)
EXT. VALLEY CLEARING - DAY. Garerit stands victorious, looking down at the now-dead two-headed giant. His hand rests on the giant's treasure hoard, which includes bags of gold, jewels, livestock, and several barrels of stolen goods. The sun shines down, casting long shadows over the scene. Garerit's eyes gleam with satisfaction as he gathers the loot.
SB (Garerit - Inner Thought): This will help get my family back on their feet. They'll have everything they lost.
CAP: With the giant slain, Garerit finds the stolen treasures his family lost.
(Ch2 Pg9 Panel-Two)
A sturdy horse-drawn wagon creaks down a dirt road, led by Uncle Crawe, a grizzled but good-natured older man with a thick beard and sharp eyes.
(Ch2 Pg9 Panel-Three)
EXT. VALLEY CLEARING - DAY. Garerit lifts one of the heavy sacks of gold, looking over it with a mix of relief and determination. He walks toward Crawe's wagon, already planning how he'll return everything that was taken. His expression is one of quiet resolve.
SB (Garerit): Time to make sure these goods get back to where they belong.
SB (Garerit - Inner Thought): If it weren't for the giant's greed, People wouldn't have to lose everything. But this should set things right.
(Ch2 Pg9 Panel-Four)
Gerarit waves Crawe down, wiping sweat from his brow. The wagon is half-filled with goods-sacks of flour, barrels, and bolts of cloth.
SB (Gerarit): "Uncle Crawe! What brings you down this road?"
SB (Crawe): "Trade, what else? But from the look of you, I'd say you've been busy stirring up trouble."
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Haliz Mostafa What a beautiful and personal story. Thank you for sharing. Writing a screenplay adaption of a novel you own the rights to is a great way to raise the profile of your work and show marke...
Expand commentHaliz Mostafa What a beautiful and personal story. Thank you for sharing. Writing a screenplay adaption of a novel you own the rights to is a great way to raise the profile of your work and show market viability...while delivering a beautiful message.
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Geoffroy Faugerolas Thank you so much, Geoffrey, for your kind words and thoughtful feedback! I truly appreciate your insights. Adapting my novel into a screenplay is something I’m very passionate abo...
Expand commentGeoffroy Faugerolas Thank you so much, Geoffrey, for your kind words and thoughtful feedback! I truly appreciate your insights. Adapting my novel into a screenplay is something I’m very passionate about, and I’m excited about the opportunity to share such a personal and meaningful story with a wider audience. Your encouragement means a lot, and I look forward to exploring the potential of this project further.
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Hi Haliz Mostafa, welcome to Stage 32! My name is Ashley Renee Smith, and I’m the Head of Community here. Thank you so much for sharing your story. Joori sounds like a deeply meaningful project, and I...
Expand commentHi Haliz Mostafa, welcome to Stage 32! My name is Ashley Renee Smith, and I’m the Head of Community here. Thank you so much for sharing your story. Joori sounds like a deeply meaningful project, and I love your mission to bring more awareness, empathy, and hope to families through film.
I’d highly recommend checking out the Screenwriting Lounge (https://www.stage32.com/lounge/screenwriting) and the Authoring & Playwriting Lounge (https://www.stage32.com/lounge/playwriting) to connect with other writers and storytellers who value real, impactful stories like yours.
You might also find the Stage 32 Writer’s Room helpful if you’re adapting your book into a screenplay. It’s a great space for developing your work and getting feedback from industry professionals. You can try your first month free here:
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We’re so happy to have you in the community, and I look forward to following your journey with Joori!