(Please note that this is done as it would be a script for a comic, I have a background in comics, so I use comic terms for the script. I do hope to get this made as a movie or short TV show. I'm looking for feedback on the pages, if you can take the time to read and leave a review in the comments. replace panels with shot.)
Ch5 Pg 5
(Ch5 Pg5 Panel 1 - Full-Width Panel)
A wide, dynamic shot of Garerit, now fully ready to respond to Garna's challenge. He grabs a small bird from a nearby tree or brush, carefully holding it in his hands. The bird is tiny in comparison to the giant, highlighting Garerit's subtle approach. The focus of the panel is on Garerit's calm expression, his eyes focused with determination. Garna is still standing confidently in the background, watching Garerit with a curious look as he prepares his next move. The contrast between the giant's brutishness and the tailor's finesse is stark.
SB (Gerarit - Thought Bubble): "I'll turn his strength into his weakness, with something far lighter than a rock."
(Ch5 Pg5 Panel 2 - Medium Panel)
Garerit tossed the bird into the sky with a gentle flick of his wrist. The motion of the bird is captured in mid-flight, soaring into the air, with motion lines showing its graceful trajectory. The size contrast between the tiny bird and the massive open sky is emphasized, making the act seem even more absurd and clever. The bird's wings flap as it takes flight, and there's a small trail of wind behind it to show its speed.
SB (Garerit - Speaking, Dialogue Bubble): "If you can throw a boulder so high, surely a rock can do the same... or better!"
(Ch5 Pg5 Panel 3 - Medium Panel)
Garna's expression shifts from confidence to confusion as he watches the bird soar into the sky. His eyes are wide, and his jaw slightly drops as he squints at the tiny creature. His posture shows uncertainty for the first time. The size of the bird compared to the giant's size creates a comical sense of scale, and Garna's confusion adds a touch of humor to the scene. There are motion lines in the background, showing the bird continuing to rise higher into the air.
SB (Garna - Speaking, Dialogue Bubble): "What? That tiny thing... so high? Impossible!"
(Ch5 Pg5 Panel 4 - Close-Up Panel)
A close-up shot of the bird soaring higher and higher into the sky, with the giant looking on in disbelief below. The bird is now but a speck against the vast sky. The sense of distance and height is conveyed through the use of perspective, as the bird continues its upward flight. Garna's voice from the previous panel is now echoed in the background, showing his growing bewilderment. The panel is designed to feel almost like a moment of awe, with the simple bird defying Garna's expectations.
SB (Garna - Thought Bubble): "It doesn't fall... Could it be... a rock that never lands?"
(Ch5 Pg5 Panel 5 - Full-Width Panel)
Garna, in full belief that the bird is indeed a massive rock that he can't see landing. Garna is now looking up at the sky, his hands placed on his hips as he watches the bird float farther and farther away. His expression is filled with astonishment and a sense of defeat as he marvels at the sight. The contrast between Garna's large body and the small bird in the distance emphasizes his misunderstanding, making the scene both comedic and impressive. Garerit stands in the foreground, his arms crossed, a confident smile creeping onto his face as he knows the giant has fallen for his trick.
SB (Garna - Speaking, Dialogue Bubble): "Such a rock... thrown so far, it cannot land. Truly, you are a worthy opponent!"
(Ch5 Pg5 Panel 6 - Close-Up Panel)
A close-up of Garerit's face with a smirk of satisfaction. His eyes gleam with amusement, and his smile is small yet knowing. The effect of his cleverness is evident in his expression as he watches Garna continue to stare at the bird. The panel is a quiet moment of victory, as Garerit's intelligence has outsmarted the giant once again. The juxtaposition between the simple nature of the trick and the giant's impressed reaction is both humorous and satisfying.
SB (Garerrit - Thought Bubble): "A little bird can fly farther than a stone ever could... and with a little wit, l've made the giant believe it."
Hi, Alexx Bar. Welcome to the community. I’m a Stage 32 Lounge Moderator. I wanted to let you know that I moved your post from the Acting Lounge to the Introduce Yourself Lounge since you're introduci...
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Alexx Bar Great to have you here. I'm sure if you follow the Acting Lounge you will find a wealth of tips through the conversations. One of the places I see comedy actors getting noticed is through sh...
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