Why I Passed On That Screenplay

Why I Passed On That Screenplay

Why I Passed On That Screenplay

Tennyson Stead
Tennyson Stead
5 years ago

For almost 10 years, I worked as a development executive for Unified Pictures and Exodus Film Group. One of my chief sources of income over the last year has been writing script coverage, writing development notes, and in general parsing screenplays for writers and producers. My friends, I have read a LOT of screenplays. If you’re an undiscovered screenwriter with more than three our four scripts out there on the market, there’s a fair chance I’ve covered you at some point.

Over the last few weeks, I’ve read a lot of discussion on Stage 32 about how and why institutional Hollywood has come to regard the overwhelming mountain of screenplays currently being produced by aspiring writers as a burden, rather than as an opportunity to discover the next great cinematic voice. Is it really even possible that the percentage of “bad writing” versus “good writing” is high enough to justify ignoring or throwing away literally an entire market full of spec scripts? How did we get here?

How the Spec Market Fell Apart

Why I Passed On That Screenplay

Most people working in development today, whether we’re talking about screenwriters, executives, or representation, did not come from a show business background, so we need to preface this conversation with the understanding that a huge majority of the people working in Hollywood today either don’t know or can’t articulate just what the hell is wrong with our development process. Most executives today come from business school, and most writers of substance come from a literary or journalistic background. To a literary or an advertising mindset, bad screenwriting is usually a problem of tone.

Nope. Good dramatic structure is about action, motivation, and conflict - scene work, in other words - just as surely as it is about act breaks and turning points. Most actors, directors, and writers who come from a classical performance background know these practices as a matter of habit, and we usually take it for granted that Hollywood greenlights productions with an eye constantly cast towards the fundamentals of drama. Because the vast majority of writers, executives, agents and managers never actually learned those fundamentals in the first place…

Things We Forgot We Knew

Almost every screenplay out there is written about passive characters. At a glance, I feel confident in saying that at least 93% of the screenplays out there on the spec market are either about passive protagonists or are hampered by weak conflict. Before we even start talking about whether a writer has any competence, before we start weeding out the racist and the sexist storytelling, before we start talking about whether a script is compelling or marketable on any level, we know that less than one out of every ten screenplays out there will have an active story to tell.

When we talk about “active” versus “passive” writing in film, we’re not talking about the difference between car chases and gunfights versus scenes about conversation and “character development.” Instead, we’re talking about scenes that are defined by how these characters are pursuing their missions and goals, versus scenes which are about how they react to this or that circumstance. With any form of acting, a character is defined first and foremost by the goal they are pursuing in the story. Every moment of that character’s screen time should be focused exclusively on the things they are doing to achieve that goal. Where the conflict comes from, in the context of action as the driving force of character, is from the fact that not everyone in a story wants the same things. In other words, goals are what bring characters into conflict.

Creative Priorities

Why I Passed On That Screenplay

In most of the development meetings I’ve had, this is the moment where the writer starts explaining to me that they know the fundamentals of screenwriting - and that the whole innovation and crux of their screenplay is that they’re working from a different set of priorities. Maybe they’re writing a comedy, and they’re putting an emphasis on the jokes over the action - and in specific response to this objection, please forgive me a brief tangent. Comedy in narrative storytelling is just a character ardently pursuing an action for which they are absurdly ill-equipped. When a little tramp tries to make it in high society, that’s funny!

So, maybe they’re writing a comedy and they let the action slide in favor of digging for unrelated laughs. Maybe the point of the movie is esoteric, and the writer is only interested in traditional structure insofar as they need to “sell” the likeability of the characters. Maybe the script has a visual hook too strong to be compromised for more classical ideas. Maybe the script is a biography or an adaptation, and the screenplay is accurately relating “what happened” according to the source material. In other words, the writer is assuring me that this script is a creative exception and that - essentially - the strength of the ideas and the appeal of the characters will carry the film or show. Right? RIIIIIIGHT?

Oof. Okay. Watch my six, dear reader, because I’m going in:

A Language of Action

Making a character “relatable” or “likeable” isn’t what makes an audience connect with them. All of us have seen audiences get behind a scoundrel or an idiot in a story with much more “sympathetic” characters sharing the screen, and we’ve wondered what made that one character so “likeable.” In every case, it’s because the character the audience fell in love with was doing something. Audiences connect to the mission, pure and simple. When a character is committed to doing something bigger than themselves, when they’re wrapped up in a goal that forces them to work so hard they’ll actually have to grow and become a more capable person to see the mission through, the audience wants to see that effort rewarded with success. It’s the mission that an audience connects to, and not some abstract metric of “sympathy” or “likeability.”

Unless there’s a core action pushing this story forward, just like an axle drives a car, nobody is going to care. No matter how much writers “sell” the characters or events of their story to the audience, no matter how visually appealing, intellectually challenging, or historically relevant a story is, audiences as a whole will not invest in anything but the efforts of another human being to achieve something greater than themselves. Whether that character succeeds or fails is not the point. Cinema is a language of action.

What makes this problem so hard for so many agents, managers, and development executives to ferret out is that there are a huge number of legitimately good writers out there writing bad screenplays. In literature, writing succeeds on the strength of a novel’s themes, on the strength of the language… and generally, of the writing! Screenwriting, in contrast, really is just about assigning actions to actors and setting them in motion. In the end, we might as well be writing textbooks and homework assignments.

On screen, even dialogue is just a form of action. Characters don’t speak for aesthetic reasons, they speak because they’re using their words to an end. Seducing someone, convincing someone, bullying or threatening someone - these are things that one person does to another person in the pursuit of a goal. In screenwriting, actions like these are literally the only legitimate reasons for a character to open their mouth. Ever.

The Industry Standard

Why I Passed On That Screenplay

Imagine, just for a moment, that I’m not describing “the ideal screenplay.” Imagine that instead, these principles are a baseline for good screenwriting. Imagine that I have passed on literally every single screenplay that failed to meet the standards of dramatic structure that I am describing in this article. How tired of reading screenplays do you think I am right now?

Our executives and reps can sense that something is horribly broken about the spec market, but they don’t have the training or the vocabulary to put their finger on the problem. So instead, they just stopped reading screenplays altogether. How do I know this? Because if these agents and producers were reading screenplays, I wouldn’t be writing their coverage.

Passive storytelling is the problem with our spec market, and right now the problem is getting worse rather than better. If there was some way to reboot the spec market, I’d push that red button in a heartbeat. If I could delete all the content that’s out there right now and educate the writers, executives, and reps about basic scenework as a fundamental value in screenwriting, the overall improvement in the quality of our media would outweigh even the loss of those few works of undiscovered genius that must be floating around in the ether.

How We Get There

Screenwriters, please start taking acting classes. Put the principles of action and motivation into your bodies, and forge strong habits of them. Learn to find your lines of action and execute your scenework just like a Marine field-strips a rifle. This is your weapon, screenwriters.

Do this for yourself, because this is one note your managers and readers don’t even know they need to give you. Nobody learns this stuff in business school. Nobody learns this in journalism. Nobody learns this in advertising. Most of you have a strong grasp of language, and some of you write beautifully. Now please, write something I can put a “consider” on.

Since the beginning of this year, screenwriter Tennyson E. Stead has written feature films for Emagine Content and Be the Change Productions. Of the 30 screenplays Stead has written, seven are produced, sold, or under option. Currently, Stead is working hand-in-hand with some of New Hollywood’s brightest producers, performers, and production talents to develop a slate of independent sci-fi and fantasy features under his “repertory film” label 8 Sided Films, which will launch with the sci-fi heist movie Quantum Theory.

Other Stage 32 Posts By Tennyson Stead:
Reality Checks from an Inspirational Cripple - Part 1
Reality Checks from an Inspirational Cripple - Part 2
How We Screwed the Showbiz Culture Up and How We Can Fix It
What is Spectacle in Film [And How Can Indie Filmmakers Use It?]

How We Screwed the Showbiz Culture Up And How We Can Fix It

Tennyson E. Stead an award-winning writer and director who has written 25 screenplays in total, and sold or optioned eight. In addition to almost 30 years of production experience on stage and screen, Stead carries a decade of experience as an independent film development and finance executive. Today, Stead's primary labors revolve around writing, directing, and developing cinema and online content as the founder of a repertory film company called 8 Sided Films.

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32 Comments on Tennyson Ewing's Article

Phyllis K Twombly
Screenwriter
I discovered screenwriting when I was in community theater. We were rehearsing at the local college. There was a poster about their upcoming film course, a veritable unicorn in their catalogue. It was thrilling to learn how acting and screenwriting are connected. This is an awesome article.
3 years ago
Lewis Martin
Director, Cinematographer, Screenwriter
Brilliant article. You really nailed it. I'll explain this to my writing students from now on.
3 years ago
Vincent Reusch
Playwright, Screenwriter
Thank you for taking the time to write this and to offer it up for free. This post and your essay about active structure will be required reading for my writing students, including fiction and playwriting because this is universal in storytelling. 
4 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
Screenwriting, when it works, is just scenework writ large. I'm glad this is helping you as a teaching tool, because that's how I use them myself! Thank you for teaching your students to write for the actor, Vincent Reusch!
4 years ago
David Schultz
Actor, Screenwriter, Filmmaker
Great article!!!
4 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
Thank you, David!
4 years ago
Debra E Peebles
Actor, Screenwriter
Perhaps this is why British and other international TV and film industries are taking us to school.  When Netflix and other streamers brought in the work of other countries it became very clear that the US networks were making very slow progress at satisfying storytelling.  Do I really have to look at the distracting Barbie and Ken appearance of any character.  Is Meryl Streep and Nichol Kidman really right for every roll with substance -- and is this why we're hiring every British actor who can do an American accent? Americans now realize those passively written, poorly acted, rehashed stories are mind-numbing when they now can watch a character step off a curb and actually get hit by the bus.  So refreshing.  I think Hollywood needs to play catch-up before everyone packs their bags for England, Australia, Norway, Ireland, etc.  It's not all about money after all.
4 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
It definitely is!
4 years ago
Debra E Peebles
Actor, Screenwriter
We do have Breaking Bad.
4 years ago
Alexander Merelo
Actor, Playwright, Screenwriter
This! As an actor, I can't relate to a character that has no clear goals or motivations. As a writer, I try creating characters that have a sense of urgency underlying their every move. They rather not talk, but if they have to, it's for a good reason - one you can sum up in a few words. 
4 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
Glad to be of service, Alexander Merelo!
4 years ago
Abdur Mohammed
Screenwriter
Thank you Tennyson for the brilliant article. Your honesty and quite frankly, "telling it like it is," brings back my faith in the "Feedback" industry. I look forward to your successes, and wish you all the best.
4 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
Thank you Abdur. I'm very glad to be of service! Welcome to Stage 32!
4 years ago
Penelope Richards
Screenwriter
Dude - You nailed this one!  Thanks for the passionate reminder of what we should be doing.
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
Thank you for the kind words, Penelope Richards! You are most welcome.
4 years ago
Susan Joyce DuBosque
Content Creator, Editor, Screenwriter, Songwriter
Great post on the importance of action. Thank you!
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
You are most welcome, Susan.
4 years ago
Jill A. Hargrave
Documentary Filmmaker, Screenwriter, Actor, Director of Development, Script Supervisor, Singer
Hello Tennyson. Thanks for this blog. I just joined Studio 32. I'm a journalist by trade, PBS documentary producer, and I'm now trying to learn the skills of screenplay writing. I have four screenplays in various stages of completion. One was named a semi-finalist last year at the 2019 Summer BAFF. I'm enjoying the journey of writing subjectively rather than objectively; although, my biggest fault is making the issue a major character instead of the backdrop for the characters to fulfill their goals. I hope to learn a lot from other members of Studio 32. 
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
Very glad to be of service, Jill! Welcome to the site!
5 years ago
Curtis Kessinger
Comedian, Director, Screenwriter
Right on the money with this blog post!  Characters taking action!
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
That's literally everything a screenplay needs to be.
5 years ago
Tennyson! Thank you so much for sharing. As I was reading, all I could think are that the principles of action you mentioned are so similar to what we learn here at the studio and when I got to your final recommendation I couldn't agree more. We have so many writers that come to the studio and even many actors that go on to be successful writers. We would like to welcome all to consider our classes to better learn the principles of action!
5 years ago
Michael LaVoie
Director of Photography
Great article. Reading reluctance among executives mirrors the viewing allergy among screening staff at film festivals.  One can only watch so many trianwrecks before you tap out  during the first 10 minutes.  Same way execs and readers bail on spec scripts within the first 10 pages. 
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
As a reader myself, the only reason NOT to bail in the first ten minutes is if the writer has actually paid for a complete read. Under no circumstances will a writer 1.) maintain a clear, deliberate, unrelenting focus on the action 2.) only after page 11.
5 years ago
Jess Parker
Actor, Screenwriter, Filmmaker
Thanks for the great blog post!
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
You are most welcome, Jess Parker!
5 years ago
Chris Morley
Playwright, Screenwriter, Script Consultant, Editor
Very helpful insights Tennyson.  Refreshing, simple, to the point.  Much appreciated! Thanks!
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
Thank you, Roy Stewart! There's a lot of challenges ahead, but we're working through them for sure!
5 years ago
Roy Stewart
Screenwriter, Director, Producer
OK.  I'm with you.  Fantastic article.  Good luck with label 8 Sided Films!
5 years ago
Geoff Hall
Screenwriter, Director, Producer
Love this - “Screenwriting, in contrast, really is just about assigning actions to actors and setting them in motion.” NOTE TO SELF: Tomorrow go out and buy a box of index cards and work out the character action of each scene for my latest spec script. Every scene will be driven by action. 
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
You are welcome, sir.
5 years ago
Geoff Hall
Screenwriter, Director, Producer
Tennyson Stead Thank you. 
5 years ago
Leonard Thomas Deaver
Producer, Screenwriter
Great article.  But I will say that action is tone.  Inaction is tone.  Character is tone.  Tone and theme are preeminent!  Ever wonder why a film crashes that is nothing but action?  They do.  We can look at the new Midway to discuss that, if you would like.  Tone and theme AND character and plot/action need to all mesh perfectly for the audience.  And it is a bitch to do so.  But it can be done  and done well.  But then I come from a liberal arts background.  So maybe I am biased against bean counters of which I was one.  However, a terrific article coming from experience.  But did I strike the right tone with my post?  *winks*
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
Earl, there's a lot of people in the industry today who would agree with you. Tone is what you use to sell something, so if you're working in advertising then it's going to be the most important element of your craft. In narrative cinema, however, the tone flows from the action. Telling an audience what to feel about toothpaste is VERY important, if you're being paid to sell toothpaste. Sitting in a movie theater, people want to be exposed to another human being's efforts to accomplish an urgent goal - and ideally, to have enough breathing room to arrive at their own feelings about the subject matter.
5 years ago
Phyllis K Twombly
Screenwriter
I discovered screenwriting because of taking a role in community theater. I'm always aware of what I'm asking of actors because of that experience.
5 years ago
Carole Ryavec
Director, Screenwriter
Many thanks for the reminders - we choose to ignore the fact that the wants and desires of even our best friends are different from ours.  By this we hide our own dramas.  
5 years ago
Max Adams
Screenwriter
Excellent piece. Will be tossing it about the internet with abandon hoping it sticks.
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
Thank you for the shares!
5 years ago
Debra Montague
Author, Screenwriter, Editor, Researcher
Adding this to my folder on "helps" for when I'm making yet another pass through the story and something just feels "off". This is enlightening because I had a friend who has no experience reading scripts, read the one I'm currently working on. I have this playing in my head and trying to write what I think resonates with the audience and she saw something completely different. She wasn't wrong. I didn't see this arc because I'm so close to the characters, at this point. I particularly identify with dialog as action. This was an exceptional article. Thank you. 
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
You are quite welcome.
5 years ago
Ingalill Roesberg
Author, Publisher, Story Analyst, Storyboard Artist
Thank you for the post! A good read. Think I agree with you ... ;)
5 years ago
Leotien Parlevliet
Author, Screenwriter
Thanks for sharing this good advise with us. I always visualize my scenes and put myself in the character´s place. When I finish the story, I always find it difficult to say goodbye to the characters.
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
Glad you enjoyed the read!
5 years ago
Donn Swaby
Actor, Producer, Screenwriter
Tennyson, great post. As a writer and actor, I know both disciplines have complimented my deeper understanding of the other. And I agree, what compels me to root for a character is when I see them trying to get or reach for something. I tend to drop out emotionally from a story w/ a passive protagonist. Having said that, I also think screenwriters need to know the difference between plat and story because a plot could have lots of action and characters busy doing things but still fail to illicit emotional endearment to the passive protagonist since there is no attempt to reach a specific goal that would be related to the protagonist's emotional, psychological and ultimately spiritual journey. A good solid plot is required but it's the story, which is the heart of the screenplay, that pulls people in emotionally. 
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
I don't really make a distinction between your idea of "story" and good stakes. If something is REALLY important to a character, then either they'll be very emotional or they'll be struggling to keep their emotions in check. Either way, a strong motivation and high stakes will never fail to keep a story emotionally relevant.
5 years ago
Holly Lancaster
Screenwriter
I love how you encapsulated comedic characters: ardently pursuing a goal for which they are absurdly ill-equipped. The acting advice is great too; I took theater from 7-12 grade, then some in college. I find myself acting out my characters' reactions all the time. It helps me to see if the scene is working. "Working" for me means provoking some sort of emotion. I'll laugh out loud or tear up if it's a good scene. I think that's deeply at the core of what you're talking about too. Going for goals = conflict = audience emotion (hope that protag will get what she wants or fear that she won't). Thanks for the post!  
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
Classical performance tools never get old. We need to get back to the fundamentals, for sure. I'm glad the article was helpful!
5 years ago
Paul Norman Rich
Marketing/PR, Producer, Screenwriter
Very knowledgeable, informative article from someone who knows story and what sells.  I often wonder how many readers, agents and producers truly know what works.  Reminds me of the famous Hollywood insider story about a writer who got his script to a big time producer.  Writer: "So did you read it?"  Producer:"Yes."  Writer: "So what do you think?"  Producer:  "How the hell would I know.  No one else has read it yet."
5 years ago
Paul Norman Rich
Marketing/PR, Producer, Screenwriter
Tennyson, I've worked inside major studios walls my entire career marketing feature films and television, mostly in the home entertainment industry (videos and DVDs).  Too often the geniuses in theatrical misstep their target market and we had to correct the marketing to the appropriate demo.  In some way your comment can be of comfort to good writers who get rejected due to incompetent readers.  The material can only rise to the level of their knowledge.  By far 90% of submitted scripts aren't ready.  However I'm sure some don't pass because the reader does not "get" the audience for which it was intended.  Fear too plays a role.  Much better to pass on a property than recommend something that fails and they get the blame.  Good luck with 8 Sided Film and developing Sci-Fi / Fantasy.  (I have one fyi if interested).  -- Paul
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
Many of them do not! Everyone's trying to make this industry work for them, and many of those people don't have any prior experience.
5 years ago
Vital Butinar
Director, Director of Photography, Editor, Filmmaker, Photographer (Still), Screenwriter, Colorist
Really great blog post. I agree. I've always had an admiration for people willing to write or read something like a screenplay. But that's me since I've struggled with dyslexia ever since I was a kid and I'm really happy that there are people who are willing to read stuff before I do anything with it and tell me where I've screwed up in advance so I can address the problems.
5 years ago
Very true -- conflict is what drives a story!  (And I'm a natural at creating conflict!)
5 years ago
Toby Tate
Author, Screenwriter, Producer, Graphic Designer, Musician
Like! Like! Like! I'm a former journalist, and after seven traditionally-published books and six screenplays, with one optioned so far, I'm still working on this.
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
I'm so glad this is helpful to you, Toby. I've been working in entertainment since I was 13, and my first writing experiences were for the stage. Basically, it seems to me like you and I are about as opposite in terms of our training as two writers can be. If I can help you with this, please feel free to reach out - and yes, take acting classes!
5 years ago
Martin Reese
Producer, Screenwriter, Director
Excellent piece. Very informative and eye-opening.
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
Geoff, THANK YOU. Martin, I'm glad it helped!
5 years ago
Geoff Harris
Director, Producer
The most important tip here is, 'Screenwriters, please take acting classes'!!
5 years ago
This piece for me functioned as a magical insight tool. I now see what's wrong (and right) in everything I've written for the screen. Thank you, Tenneyson Stead.
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
You are very, very welcome. I'm so glad it helped.
5 years ago
Vishani Miller
actor, author, musician, screenwriter
Thank you so much for sharing this!! I couldn’t figure out why people were so sympathetic to the “bad boy” in my project. I’m inspired...*as I give away some of his actions to the other main protagonist. ;-)
5 years ago
Thomas Jamieson
Film/Theatre Journalist, Screenwriter, Director, Producer
This is such an insightful and helpful article, Tennyson. Thanks for sharing.
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
My pleasure, Thomas! Yes, Rolando, I do script coverage. Please feel free to PM me.
5 years ago
Rolando Gomez
Producer, Screenwriter, Author, Photographer (Still), Director
Great blog post/article and information. Curious if you do private script coverage? Thanks for sharing your experience and thoughts.
5 years ago
Alan Madden
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
The industry seems to be hung up on the log line. What happens to the great script with the poor logline? 
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
Honestly, everyone's just looking for reasons not to read - and because the logline is always the first thing we see, it's the first thing we reject. If the logline is "too good," then it'll probably be something else. In my experience, it's much more productive to get out there, physically help people with their productions, and write in service to the community you've actually built than it is to query. I've sold a script or two through queries - but almost all my sales are to people who needed the help of a writer, and who called me because they knew me.
5 years ago
Vital Butinar
Director, Director of Photography, Editor, Filmmaker, Photographer (Still), Screenwriter, Colorist
Really good question! My guess is they get passed on and en up in the proverbial archive of a drive unfortunately.
5 years ago
Richard Gustason
Actor, Comedian, Screenwriter
Some good info here.  Thanks for posting. 
5 years ago
Tennyson Ewing Stead
Director, Producer, Screenwriter
Glad to be of service!
5 years ago
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