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A man trying to find peace and quiet moves in to an inner city, multicultural neighborhood where he quickly gets pulled in by the neighborhood’s eccentric characters and internal chaos.
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Sounds like a funny show, Fahmid Kamal. I have three suggestions for the logline. Small suggestions.
#1) Give the man an adjective.
#2) Change "in to" to "into."
#3) Change the second "neighborhood" to "community" so you don't use "neighborhood" twice.
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I'm confused why someone trying to find peace and quiet would move into an urban environment... could you clarify his motivation?
Sounds like a funny show, Fahmid Kamal. I have three suggestions for the logline. Small suggestions.
#1) Give the man an adjective.
#2) Change "in to" to "into."
#3) Change the second "neighborhood" to "community" so you don't use "neighborhood" twice.
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I'm confused why someone trying to find peace and quiet would move into an urban environment... could you clarify his motivation?
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