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THE MAN WHO CHANGES FATES

THE MAN WHO CHANGES FATES
By Val Chernyavskiy

GENRE: Drama
LOGLINE:

Travel agency offers tours back in time to 1912, take a ride on the Titanic. A married couple experiencing relationship difficulties decides on such a tour. Husband meets a woman and falls in love with her. He decides to return with her to the present, leaving his wife on the Titanic, ruining the present and future for all people.

SYNOPSIS:

The future has already arrived. A time travel company offers wealthy clients a new type of vacation, traveling back in time to 1912. A trip on the Titanic before the collision with the iceberg is in great demand. The rule of tourism is not to talk to anyone for a long time. Only greetings, farewells, drinking alcohol, admiring the views, sunsets, sunrises. Ben and wife Chloe decide to tour on the Titanic. The couple has romance issues, and Ben is in rehab for alcoholism. Their common goal is to restore former romantic feelings and extinguish Ben's craving for alcohol. But on the very first evening on the Titanic, the spouses have a quarrel due to the fact that the husband looks at beautiful women. Ben gives Chloe a sedative and she falls asleep. The husband, taking a couple of bottles of whiskey, begins to wander around the liner until he finds a charming girl named Sarah. After talking with her not much, he understands that it was her that he was looking for all his life, sincere, trusting and kind. They agree to meet tomorrow. Ben removes the "return bracelet" from his wife Chloe, and gives it to Sarah when they meet. And he says that this is the most fashionable bracelet in the places where he comes from. Before the crash, Sarah and Ben return from the tour. Ben asks to be quiet and agree with what Ben says. When Ben comes home, he realizes that his pharmaceutical business has disappeared due to the fact that he took Sarah with him, and not his wife Chloe. Ben is sad and drinking, but Sarah has already found a job as a hairdresser and invites him to get a job in a taxi, as one of her clients needs new drivers for the taxi depot. A day later, Ben and Sarah are kidnapped by tourism officials in time and demand an explanation of how it happened that after Ben's tour, the car for tourists broke down and gives out only the date for tourism 1944. Normandy.

When checking the machine for tourism in time. The machine responded anomalously to Ben and Sarah, setting the tourism date to 1912. Port. Landing on the Titanic.

Ben and Sarah are forcibly sent to 1912, along with the warden, who must find out the reason for the breakdown of the machine related to Ben's actions in 1912. Ben gets the warden drunk and removes his return bracelet. Ben and Sarah also take off their bracelets and throw the Titanic's firebox into the furnace. This leads to breakage and a decrease in the speed of the liner. They spend the evening on deck, drinking champagne, dancing, they don't know if their actions will save the liner or they will sink. They fall asleep on the deck in an embrace, in the morning they will be an employee of the crew of the liner and says that they are already in New York. They kiss and hug.

Amazing Kacee

I would suggest you research what a logline is so you know what goes into it, as what you write is not a logline just a few random sentences. Best of luck Also loglines should be a max of 29 words! Spielberg says 25 max!

Val Chernyavskiy

Amazing Kacee, thanks for the criticism, I will think about how to improve the logline.

Val Chernyavskiy

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