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WHERE'S MY DAUGHTER?

WHERE'S MY DAUGHTER?
By Maurice Vaughan

GENRE: Drama, Crime
LOGLINE:

After her teenage daughter gets abducted by sex traffickers, a depressed widow falls deeper into depression and searches the city to find her.

SYNOPSIS:

Crime/Drama short script for sale

Sub-genres: Thriller/Mystery

Budget: Micro

Think "Taken" with a depressed widow.

Synopsis: A depressed widow, Victoria Smith, has an argument with her disrespectful teenage daughter, Skylar Smith, because Skylar is moving out to live with her boyfriend. Fed up with Skylar, Victoria tells her, “Don’t have anyone call me if something happens to you!” Victoria gets a visit from Detective Strong about Skylar’s abduction. Victoria freaks out. Victoria falls deeper into depression while waiting for the police to find Skylar. Victoria decides to search for herself. She arms herself with pepper spray and searches for Skylar. She passes out flyers that say there’s a reward for info on Skylar’s whereabouts. For the reward money, a teen tells Victoria where Skylar is. Victoria follows the tip to a house that’s owned by sex traffickers and fights a paranoid thug. Victoria finds Skylar being held captive inside. Skylar apologizes for the fights and disrespect, but all Victoria cares about is that she found her daughter.

Potential: Feature script and/or series (TV, web, or limited)

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WHERE'S MY DAUGHTER?

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Noel Thompson

I wouldn't lead with "but with less action", instead turn it around to stress what's unique about yours, "It's Taken from the mom's perspective and with more connection between the parent-child relationship dynamic." Not exactly that wording, but it sounds like you're going for more "3 Billboards..." feel, so using phrases like "character-driven" "from the heart"...

Maurice Vaughan

Thanks for commenting, Rohit. I saw "Taken." I haven't seen "Furie." I'm actually pitching "Where's my Daughter?" to sell it. It's a micro-budget short script.

Maurice Vaughan

Cool, Noel. Thanks for commenting. I'll go back and rethink that part.

Adam Jestin

Great logline. Just be careful not to turn your synopsis into a story outline!

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Maurice Vaughan

I appreciate it, Nate Rymer.

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Maurice Vaughan

Thank you, Tasha Lewis.

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Maurice Vaughan

Thanks for rating, Jill Godley.

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Maurice Vaughan

Thanks for the rating, Mista Martel.

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