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After being blackmailed by a racist immigration agent, an apprehensive undocumented day care worker with a secret ability to harden anything teams up with her cosplay-obsessed co-worker to make and sell illegal all-plastic ghost guns to avoid deportation back to Africa where she’s wanted for murder.
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Very quirky and unique premise! I think you have very strong, personal stakes and I love the sci-fi aspect. The logline can definitely use some more polishing and trimming, but your basic narrative is sound. Excellent work, MB!
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LOL. I love the imagery that popped into my head while reading this. It didn't play out like a drama. I got more of a comedy vibe from it. Either way, it sounds different and interesting and like something I would want to watch.
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