What do the slackers do after they stumble into a river poisoned by an illegal biogenetics laboratory?

Maurice Vaughan since they are filmmakers on a shoot, they investigate and video-capture nefarious illegal activity by surveillance at the laboratory site, and collab with a journalist to break the crime story to the police and media.

That's an interesting story, Daniel Stuelpnagel. I think you should work those things into the logline.

Thank you Maurice Vaughan yes I hear you; and I enjoy the ongoing framework of loglines on here and several platforms;

we work the loglines to do a bunch of different things, and some people look for the kernel of the story, others seek opposition, some prefer formulaic structure and others go more into specific angles; I intentionally keep it lean and hopefully intriguing but I know it might seem flat or empty to some readers;

I think we each have to go with our own artful considerations, especially if it's a completed script as opposed to just fielding new concepts.

I like to keep it fairly short and punchy, trying to evoke tone, so I don't think I have room to go into the full story on this one, but even if I did I like it vague and intriguing,

but hopefully when you hear what sounds like an ensemble cast stumbling into a possible adventure / solving a crime, you might anticipate that they will take up the challenge!

I appreciate your thoughts and helping me articulate some of these considerations, it's definitely an ongoing process as we go to industry people with loglines, I have gotten a couple of script requests so I think my craft is on target.

You're welcome, Daniel. Sorry for the late reply. I must've forgot to comment.

Maurice Vaughan cheers man! I think it's exciting even when our projects are in the developmental stages, on the drawing board, to be juggling multiple scripts and screen stories, I appreciate you and I know you're immersed in the work, looking forward to hearing about your projects when they emerge into the public eye!

Thanks, Daniel Stuelpnagel. Yeah, it's great to have multiple projects at once. That way I can put down one project (when I'm struggling with it) and move on to the next one, then I can go back to the first project later on.

I just reposted this fun adventure/comedy script with a fresh polish, ᕕ(⌐■_■)ᕗ ♪♬

I did a nice punch-up to really make it more family-friendly, tightened up some of the dialogue, added a couple of scenes back in, more laughs, a few edgy bits,

and revisiting the ensemble cast which despite receiving some critique for that (industry people are generally not in favor) I've kept it intact and even doubled down on it a bit by giving the characters more scenes full of repartee, riposte, arguments.

If I believe it works and there are ample successful comps to support that, even if they emerged from established studio writing teams and years of development, then I am determined to lock this script such as it is and not doubt my creative choices,

in fact, writing this somewhat sprawling piece was a great platform for making the subsequent feature spec in my portfolio much more contained and focused by contrast, so I'm finding that rather than "fix" elements of a script in response to consultation notes, it serves me better to go my own way and then work the thinking behind those notes into the next project.

Plenty of story material and a fun Scooby-Doo-type family-friendly four-quadrant adventure! I enjoyed writing this one so much and am looking forward to producing some related micro-budget social media content to develop the proof-of-concept reel in 2023 !! ᕕ(⌐■_■)ᕗ ♪♬

Avanti !!!

I'm so inspired to move forward on schedule, about another six weeks of pre-production time on producing this micro-budget short reel based on my leading feature spec script here,

Another three weeks of complete immersion in Studio Binder and script revisions, mostly collecting props, scouting locations, I give myself a greenlight on this one to be completed and released in 2023!

Leonardo Ramirez thank you for the rating!

As I look back on completion of this Adventure-Comedy script that it's been two years, amazing, this one has become a life-changing project where I am focusing so much joyful energy with clarity to apply it as a student project,

a testing environment of all I've learned, a fun social media property that will take even another year to complete, it's such a fun adventure journey after so many years of uncertainty,

more progress coming soon as I am still shooting and bringing the first episode / sequence into post-production for a film festival submission (which may not get in and I was reluctant to do, but it's helped me to accelerate by having a deadline for partial completion!) ...

but even now I chart out a course for an even more lofty aspiration to evolve not only as a Writer, not only as a Director, but further as a Producer to envision and execute the entire process of Marketing and Distribution albeit in a tiny microcosm,

but that helps me to maintain a low-risk project and use it to develop my creative skills,

to see not only logistical roadblocks but also to acknowledge my own limitations and preferences, with discernment,

knowing that I'm being intelligent about not getting in over my head, rather take the risks on a small (literally mini-action figures!) micro-budget project and let the adventure sail to the farthest horizons !!