On Writing : Just wondering! by Gregory Barone

OK D.E. White just the first ten lines of the chapter and not the whole 1K chapter at a time? I can also do it in ten line intervals for the chapter?

Are we talking 10 lines of any length, or just dialog? I've seen thousands of movies, and to this day I couldn't tell you the first ten lines of dialog of any of them. There's a point where less is nothing.Without context, description of some sort, 10 lines ain't a'gonna do it for me. Unless ... those lines are long ones: 1. It was a cold day in the South of France when I first met Pierre on the pier playing the bagpipes with a side of haggis for his Dog, Harry, who followed him around doing tricks for drachmas. 2. The men in the rubber rafts looked like Nazis to me, but I could be wrong, as I have been wrong before. 3. Like the time I mistook nuns for demons.

You get my point.

D.E. White ok, so like the first paragraph of a chapter of a story of mine would b ok? Jenean McBrearty

Gregory Barone Are you referring to the first chapter written in a novel or short story format, or the first scene of a screenplay? If it's a novel or short story scene of 1000 words, you can send it to me and I will give you feedback. Prefer word doc for ease of commenting if possible. Is there something particular you want to know? random_spirit@yahoo.com

the frist chapter of a novel Sallie Olson . do you charge for your feedback??

Gregory Barone No charge. I believe in writers helping each other. Especially when it comes to beta reading and feedback. ;)

ok Sallie Olson its very nice of you to do this for free, I send you the chapter I'm working on for my story and look forward to seeing your feedback.

Sallie Olson do you have a website or something?

Gregory: Sure, I'd read a first chapter (as long as you don't write like Dickens!). Have to warn you, I close-read. I'm on facebook & you can pm me for e-mail address.

Gregory Barone Hmm, I'm not seeing it in my email inbox so far. What was the subject line in case I'm overlooking it? My website is www.sallieolson.com

Sallie Olson sorry, I haven't sent it yet.

Gregory Barone Oh, okay. LOL! I'm going to run to the bank. I'll check my email when I return, so no rush. :)

Jenean McBrearty just to let you know I don't read any of Dickens's books. seen some of the movie adaptions of his stories. so I just look u up on FB with the same name as on here?

Gregory Barone Notes/comments sent to your email inbox a few minutes ago! Let me know if you have any questions! :)

Yep. I use the same name.