I read your script... Have you thought about adding the end to the beginning and how you get there is the rest of it? I mention that because due the time it takes to get to see what it is they find...(Black) It relies heavily on dialogue. And with that being stated, I do not think you would gather enough talent to sell it like say Breakfast Club, or the holy chalice Stand by Me. Even that had a dead body at the beginning. Just something to consider.. Unless I missed something? I must be honest at pg 30 I had enough set up of characters and really wanted some meat. I then flipped to page 50 to see what is the premise, then shot to the end after page 55 as it has no action, or drama. TO ME in MY opinion. If I shot that movie it would be off the strip, due to Chain of Title and getting permission from every T,D&H in it. I would start with killing one of the kids off in the beginning. Then take us on the journey to how that happened. 1/2 way of course. Then the back half would be justify his death and get him back in some way. Be it in spirit or lesson. Funny right. Someone actually checks your stuff out here, Instead of the typical narcissistic, "oooh, ooh" (in my best horseshack from welcome back Kotter) lets connect/ network. I have people who connect with me and have not even viewed my reel(s) Peace Si

From one Simon to another Simon, thanks for the read! I have had some professional readers evaluate the material and although it is never easy to hear someone say your child is cross-eyed, I come around to agreeing with most of their point of view. I understand your concept and actually thought about doing something similar but this one came together as it stands. I have three more in the hopper and one of them is definitely 1 before 2 before 3 before 4 etc. Mixing it up a bit for a completely nonlinear story. We shall see if it works. I have your reel marked for viewing tonight...

I can see why this script won contests. Strong work!