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DARKNESS IN THEIR EYES
By Alexandr Khlopenko

GENRE: Crime, Thriller
LOGLINE: When an uncompromising  private detective discovers her client could be a serial killer -- it's an all out race not to become the killer's next victim.

SYNOPSIS:

JANE MANCHESKY, 38, disguised as a housekeeper enters a hotel suite. It is empty and she immediately starts thoroughly searching the room for something. She finds a hidden wall safe, opens it, takes photos of all the papers inside of it, and leaves right before the suite owner comes inside. She throws her wig in the bin and leaves the hotel. While she’s driving she phones her client and tells him that she got the photos and is sending them as soon as she gets the transfer. She drives to her office - Manchesky Investigative Solutions, where a rich dressed, elderly couple is waiting for her. She tells her secretary CLARA, 25, to invite them into her office. They ask her to investigate their son ARTHUR, 30, a classic Ivy League graduate, frat-fuck playboy for any “sins” before he gets married to a girl from another influential family. She declines because they will not like what she might find and she already had clients who were not willing to pay for things they did not like. They offer 40,000$ as an advance and twice that, if she finds anything. Jane accepts the offer. She sets up all the wires and bugs in his apartments and families house, monitors his social networks and emails. Nothing strange or off-putting. She follows his movements around the city until loses him in the slums at night. While she wanders among the homeless, he escapes before she can take a photo of him, but she traces back to the shack were she finds a girl with a slit throat. She calls her ex-colleague WILL, 43, from CID and escapes before their arrival. It forces her to dig deeper into the suspect’s life while giving almost clean reports to his parents. Her friend from CID finds eight more victims – good-looking girls, raped and their throats slit. No evidence, no leads – nothing pointing at who might have done it. All of the girls were from different backgrounds – from whores to financial advisors. Jane investigates the girls and their possible connections with Arthur, but seems like there is nothing between them – the age, social status, hair color and height are different, their sexual preferences, the clubs and restaurants were never the same, except for the that gas station his father owned. They all stopped or were near one of the father’s gas stations at some point. She went to all of them to get the tapes from the surveillance cams but they all were absent or destroyed on the days of murders. Absence of evidence becomes the evidence. She gathers all the information and goes straight to the bride CHRISTINE, 29, and her family to show them everything she found. Instead, Arthur himself greets her in the fiancés house and invites her inside. She shows them old CID card and lies about coming to inform his future wife about a serial murderer in the city and that she might fall into his profile. Under constant pressure from Arthur, Jane almost speaks about her suspicion about him but leaves before he gets the chance to break her. On the way home, she sees that she has been followed. They circle the city like a vulture and his prey. Will calls her to tell that her secretary Clara is killed – raped and her throat cut. Jane asks Will to come and shows him all the evidence she got and tells whom she suspects and can prove it. When Will hears Arthur’s surname he laughs and says that there’s nothing she or anyone else can do about it – his parent are so high up the ladder, they are practically invincible. Before leaving, he gives her a gun. She reports to Arthur’s parents that he has no “sins” on him, but she still wants to continue her surveillance. They decline her offer and pay her another 80 grand. Jane decides to confront Arthur and make him confess. She adjusts her phone, wires and bugs so they will record everything she sees and hears. Jane makes her way into their house when the wedding ends and finds them in the bedroom – Arthur abusing new wife with a diamond-incrusted dagger waiting on the night table. In the middle of the process, he grabs the dagger but Jane shoots first. She hits him in the shoulder but he jumps up and runs. Jane follows him – they fight in the dark corridors of the house, loses her gun and Arthur almost kills her if not for his wife to grab the gun and shoot him his brains out. Jane recorded everything.

Shawn Speake

When a ,descriptor, private detective discovers her client could be a serial killer -- it's an all out race not to become the killer's next victim.

Alexandr Khlopenko

well thanks, that sounds a lot better :D

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