Screenwriting : Titles, by Dru Holley

Its about strong Female characters!!!

Do you describe the men's asses in your scripts?

It would be less offensive to say "she dances suggestively or seductively" As soon as I read a sleezy description of a female character's physical attributes, which have nothing to do with the story, I'm put off reading any further. And what's strong about twerking? Women who have brains (one definition of a strong woman) don't need to twerk to be able to get on with things (unless they're working undercover) You don't have to agree with anyone else's opinion, but the fact that you've teen told your descriptions of female characters are frowned upon should give you food for thought.

Personally, I think mentioning twerking is a specific detail that is likely totally relevant to setting the scene. It's direct and clear and that's what the scene direction should be. No problem with that. I would leave adjectives like "juicy" to the characters in dialogue. "Curvy knockout" could capture what you're looking for. I do think it's important not to alienate readers with a description that objectifies - again, leave that to the characters if it's consistent with their values (or lack thereof). The screenplay I was lucky to option is being produced this fall and the scene/action descriptions include several curse words and quips and occasionally break the third wall to address the reader directly. Some producers hate it, but all it took was one to like and now it's sold. I usually DON'T do that, but felt it was appropriate with the comedic tone I was setting. I don't think there's any strict rule but I would always keep in mind that unless you know EXACTLY who's reading your work there's always the chance "juicy ass" leads to the reader dismissing your work. But in the end it's your work and you know it better than anyone else. Good luck!

Anytime you describe a woman based on her physical attributes, you're making her scenery rather than a character. If her ass isn't relevant to the plot, don't mention it.

"Hollywood" isn't one gigantic entity that feels and acts with one brain. "Hollywood" may seem to act with one voice but that one voice is profit. Whoever explained to you that "Hollywood" frowns upon the way you explain women in your story doesn't know what they are talking about. "Hollywood" only frowns on scripts they think will not attract an audience. That said, the others have given you great advice. "A juicy ass" may not be essential to your story - I agree with Sean, the type of dancing (twerking) might be, the size or type of ass the woman has makes her scenery as Lauri mentions. That usually is not relevant to your story. But if that's the way you write then go for it! I know readers, producers and exec's; if your story is outstanding something as minor as a character description will not hold the script back.

Twerking is super relevant, its what some women do, Its a dance. But saying she has a juicy ass might be a little much, @Sean Curvy knockout sounds a lot better.

@Leona, CJ and DiPietra you're right I do need to explain women better except for the way they look, but how?

Hi Dru There’s a great site called Whatascript - http://www.whatascript.com/index.html Tons of helpful, non nonsense tips. Here’s the section on writing characters. http://www.whatascript.com/fictional-character-04.html Hope it helps.

@Leona you're right there's so to learn to with this, this site is good thank you.