Your Stage : Pitch video by Brent Bokovoy

I just put up my campaign page for my first feature film. It is a dark comedy horror film about a gang of hillbillies that go down to the border to try and stop any potential non-American from entering...but unfortunately for them....s**t happens! I would love any critique on the campaign and pitch video. I'm working on another edit right now...I had to rush this for a contest seedandspark are putting on. https://www.seedandspark.com/fund/wild-beasts-of-the-desert#story