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Matthew S.

Log line

Solus Sum

GENRES: Drama

Sarah wakes up to find herself alone in what she thinks is a post-apocalyptic world. What she finds out in the end is shocking.

The ending is a twist. What do ya'll think of the title? It's Latin for "I am alone". Love any feedback.

Debbie Croysdale

Hi Graham The title is COOL! I would not split the logline into two sentences and would omit some unnecessary words. Also the last line is more of a statement of fact, than a hook to lure reader. I would put the SHOCK at the beginning, and build on the higher threat/stakes that follow. Eg. This just quick example before my battery goes.

“Sarah is shocked to wake up alone, in a seemingly post apocalyptic world, but its just the beginning of a sinister battery of forces that threaten her whole family.” (OR “whole of mankind”.) Etc etc. Thanks for the share.

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