Anyone have time to read 22 pages?!
Looking for some constructive criticism on a pilot script I wrote, most likely for a web series. It's called "Leave it to cleaver" it's like the Adventures of Ozzie and Harriet if the Nelson family were a bunch psychopaths. Anything will help. It's hard to get criticism outside my circle of people. Can send it via email!
Paul. You can send it to me at danguardino@yahoo.com
You can send them to me, I'd be more than happy to help. rmiller0911@gmail.com
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@Paul Have you thought of posting your pilot here under log lines/screenplay? A broad section of different thinkers will give it fresh eyes and may even like it enough to assist. Also constantly read other pilots that proved successful, if you want Breaking Bad Pilot, message me and I will send. The last several years “binge” viewing’s become the norm with many web series and given more outlets for writers due to shows of thirty minutes or under. The “Hybrid” genre is also growing and as we speak there will morph more cross pollinations of ideas. A pilot might grab attention in many different ways but one of the most important factors reader/exec/producer will consider is “Does this show have legs?” (Unless its a pitch for a one off closed ended story).
Hey everybody, thanks for the critics on my script! A little late but update on my script, I made it to the second round of the Austin film Festival! Oh yeah! I sent it in before I had the extra eyes on it. Funny enough, a lot of the readers critics from the Festival were pretty similar to the ones I got here! So keep on reading, and maybe I wont jump the gun before having some outside readers take a look! Thanks paul!!