Hello and happy Saturday,
I have a question: Does anyone know where I can get help with improving the readability and coherence of my pitch? I've submitted my pitch before and received positive feedback on the idea. However, one person suggested clarifying the storyline, while another felt like there were multiple movies combined into one. I just want to make sure it's clear before another submission.
Any guidance or recommendations would be greatly appreciated. Thank you in advance!
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Hello, Nastaran. While I haven't pitched a script myself, I have covered the topic in my script coverage program and would be more than happy to take a look at yours.
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Hi Nastaran Nouri, one of Stage32 Writer's Room perks is the opportunity is to listen in to the weekly practice pitches, pitch, and get their live critics. One statement that Brooklyn focusing on is, "The pitch is all about your Protag."
I have not read your pitch but what they like about "your idea" is a keeper as is.
The note suggesting 'clarifying the storyline', infers that somehow they lost track of the Protagonist's Journey. A touch up of the "Protag" section of your pitch and remove all references to other movies except for the "two (marketing/genre) Comps" might get them to request your script. Good luck and keep writing.
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Thank you Paul Rivers This is VERY helpful.