So for the past few months, I haven't been able to write anything. Had some ideas but when the words don't flow, I just feel the idea isn't right. Though I'm happy to say I've finally been able to start a new rom-script titled, "Do Not Disturb" (think "The Parent Trap" meets "Knocked Up" but w/LGBTQ leads). However, I'm torn between two loglines.
"A pair of recently orphaned twin brothers born to two different men switch places to meet the fathers they never knew but end up trying to reunite their broken family"
"The high profile lives of a rising screenwriter and a former rockstar are upended when they meet the sons they gave up for adoption and are forced to confront their buried past."
Which appears to be more attention grabbing?
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The first, because you describe the fathers as passive.
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The first logline is more attention grabbing, Xavion Niles. I like the first logline because "end up trying to reunite their broken family" sounds better/more exciting (I think "forced to confront their buried past" is vague), the first logline sounds more like a "Parent Trap" kinda movie, and the focus of the first logline is on the twins as the protagonists.