Introduce Yourself : Author by Slt Armstrong

Great to have you here Sit!

Welcome to the community, Slt Armstrong. I really like the title of your book series! You could also make a post in the Authoring & Playwriting Lounge, asking for advice on how to get a manager and agent (www.stage32.com/lounge/playwriting).

Thank you Maurice currently I am try to get funding for the editoral of my series also as well as this I have had 25 rejections from agents however this isn't going to stop me

You're welcome, Slt Armstrong. That's a great attitude to have!

You might wanna check out these resources:

Financing/Crowdfunding Lounge: www.stage32.com/lounge/fundraising

Financing Blogs: www.stage32.com/blog/tags/financing-85

Financing Education: www.stage32.com/education#financing

Hope you get a rep and funding!

So do I myself I have already set up a gofundme page but unfortunately I have had only two donations https://www.gofundme.com/f/funding-to-help-edit-my-green-girl-book?fbcli...

I checked out your campaign, Slt Armstrong. Great picture of the green women. I think you need to polish your campaign page so you'll get more donations. Here are some suggestions:

#1) Add a logline to your campaign page so people will know what your book series is about.

#2) Add more visuals that tie into your book series.

#3) Add a short video (a video of you talking about your campaign or a proof-of-concept video/book series trailer) if you're able to.

Also, I’m a Stage 32 Lounge Moderator, Slt Armstrong. I wanted to let you know I moved your post from the Financing/Crowdfunding Lounge to the Your Stage Lounge because it’s promotion. Promotion can go in the Your Stage Lounge and on Your Wall.

You can post your promotion in one of the main Lounges (Financing/Crowdfunding Lounge, Screenwriting Lounge, Filmmaking/Directing Lounge, etc.) if your post starts a conversation that’s helpful and educational to the community.

Example: If you post about your crowdfunding campaign in the Financing/Crowdfunding Lounge, within that post you could start a discussion about your experience running a campaign, give a tip on running a campaign, etc. This doesn’t have to be long, just something that starts a conversation that’s helpful and educational.

You can also post your promotion in one of the main Lounges if you're asking for feedback.

You could also make a post in the Financing/Crowdfunding Lounge, asking for advice on how to set up your campaign page so you'll get more donations.

Let me know if you have any questions.

Thank you and also sorry can I get your opinion of this please?

https://www.gofundme.com/f/funding-to-help-edit-my-green-girl-book?utm_c...

Please can anyone help me?

You're welcome, Slt Armstrong. Did you see my suggestions for your campaign page in the comment?

I did yes and made the changes thank you

You're welcome, Slt Armstrong. Ok, I'll take another look at your campaign page.

Thank you Maurice

I like the additions, Slt Armstrong. I think they'll help you get more donations.

Maybe add one or two more visuals if you have them. And maybe add a page from your book. Just suggestions.

I think you still need a logline. Maybe put your logline after the first paragraph on your campaign page. Here’s a logline template that might come in handy:

“After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ _______ (an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality and the main character’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/participates/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes).”

The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: “A _______ _______ (an adjective that describes the main character’s personality and the protagonist’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/participates/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).”

You're welcome, Slt Armstrong.

Could I maybe include the main points from my proposal as that contains information on my book series

Sure, Slt Armstrong.

Please let me know what you think of this? https://www.gofundme.com/f/funding-to-help-edit-my-green-girl-book

Do you think that this might help?

Yeah, I think that helps, Slt Armstrong. Your page looks a lot better. I have a few suggestions:

#1) Add a logline for your book series. Some people might not have time to read the main points from your proposal.

#2) Remove the extra space after "The Green Girl and The Serum."

#3) Remove the extra space before the second paragraph ("The Green Girl Destiny is a Young Adult Science Fiction book which is the second book in my Green Girl series. It follows the story of three generations of a family cursed by a genetic code which has given them superhuman abilities and powers.").

#4) Move the artwork (the green woman with blonde hair). Right now, it breaks up the sentence "If you can please donate to me?"

I will thank you

With the Logline where can I find that?

Ok made those changes https://www.gofundme.com/f/funding-to-help-edit-my-green-girl-book

I just hope that people donate to this

You're welcome, Slt Armstrong. Here’s a logline template that can help you write a logline for your book series:

“After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ _______ (an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality and the main character’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/participates/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes).”

The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: “A _______ _______ (an adjective that describes the main character’s personality and the protagonist’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/participates/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).”

Also, there's still an extra space before the second paragraph on your campaign page ("The Green Girl Destiny is a Young Adult Science Fiction book which is the second book in my Green Girl series. It follows the story of three generations of a family cursed by a genetic code which has given them superhuman abilities and powers.").

Where would I need to place this? Also do you think that people will donate to this?

I suggest placing your logline after the paragraph that starts with "My name is Sean Armstrong I am the writer and author of the Green Girl and the serum," Slt Armstrong.

Do you think that people will donate to this?

It's a dream of mine

I think with that catchy title, what your book series is about, and the changes you made to your campaign page, people will donate, Slt Armstrong.

Thank you please can you let me know what you think of this? https://www.gofundme.com/f/funding-to-help-edit-my-green-girl-book

Slt Armstrong welcome! Regarding your GoFundMe page, you need a better cover image. One that pops and has some catchy artwork / title on it, etc. Also, a pitch video goes a long way. Regarding your fund raise, is your publisher wanting you to pay them to edit your book?

Hi Stephen hope that you are well? As for a publisher I haven't yet found one as of yet

Hi Sit,

After working on things mentioned, maybe this link to publishers helps:

www.nicolemelanson.com/disability-lit-resources/presses-and-publishers-o...

Don't shoot your arrows yet, first create the best presentation possible.

Good luck. Rutger

I took another look at your page, Slt Armstrong. I like the new cover image more, but I agree with Stephen Folker that you need a better cover image that pops and has some catchy artwork/title on it.

I think your logline needs some work. Something like: "After getting injected with a serum that turns her into a green-skinned superweapon, a _______ (the key adjective that describes her personality) woman fights to stop another Mega Human from creating an army with the serum and taking control of the world."

I also noticed spacing issues in your Book Summary section. There are some paragraphs that have too many spaces in between them, and there are some paragraphs that don't have any spaces in between them.

And I suggest putting "If you can please donate to me" on one line.

What do you suggest?

What do you think?

https://www.gofundme.com/f/funding-to-help-edit-my-green-girl-book

You could make a poster with Canva.com to use as your cover image, Slt Armstrong. Or you could hire someone to make a poster. There are a lot of talented designers on Stage 32. You could post an ad on the Job Board (www.stage32.com/find-jobs).

Your logline is better. Two suggestions for your logline though:

#1) Add a comma after "superheroine" so the person reading your logline doesn't get winded.

#2) I think "battles another superhuman faction from taking control of the serum in order to build an army" needs a better structure. What you have right now doesn't mention the stakes (taking control of the world).

The first two paragraphs in the Book Summary section are jumbled together. I suggest adding a paragraph break before "After a long battle with the military..."

I suggest adding paragraph breaks in the Series Summary section.

Hi Slt Armstrong it's great to e-meet you and thank you for sharing your journey! If you're interested, I recommend checking out the Authoring lounge for more about publishing! Check out here>>https://www.stage32.com/lounge/playwriting

What do you think of this? https://www.gofundme.com/f/funding-to-help-edit-my-green-girl-book

I like that you added "Will she be able to defeat this faction and regain her lost humanity? Find out in the Green Girl Destiny," Slt Armstrong. I think that's gonna get more people interested in your campaign.

I still think "battles another superhuman faction from taking control of the serum in order to build an army" needs a better structure. Maybe something like: "battles to stop a superhuman faction from taking control of the serum to build an army and rule the world."

OK I'll update that

Ok, Slt Armstrong. I think the paragraphs in the Series Summary section need spaces between them. Other than that and the last part of the logline, I think you're ready to go. Others on here might have more suggestions.

How much space?

Also what do you think? https://www.gofundme.com/f/funding-to-help-edit-my-green-girl-book

The spacing in the Series Summary is fine now, Slt Armstrong.

I think "battles another superhuman faction from taking control" sounds off.

What do you recommend me changing that to?

One of these, Slt Armstrong:

"fights to stop a superhuman faction from taking control of the serum to build an army and rule the world."

"battles to keep a superhuman faction from taking control of the serum to build an army and rule the world."

Thank you let me know what you think of this? https://www.gofundme.com/f/funding-to-help-edit-my-green-girl-book

You're welcome, Slt Armstrong. I noticed an extra period after "rule the world."

Does this need changing?

I think so, Slt Armstrong. Just the period.

Please let me know if there are any other changes that I need to make? https://www.gofundme.com/f/funding-to-help-edit-my-green-girl-book

I don't have any more suggestions, Slt Armstrong. Your page looks better.

Thank you so am I good to go?

You're welcome, Slt Armstrong. There is one more thing. Read Stephen Folker's suggestion again about a better cover image.

Is this any better? https://www.gofundme.com/f/funding-to-help-edit-my-green-girl-book

I think you need an actual poster with the details that Stephen Folker mentioned, Slt Armstrong. If you’re not able to get a poster made, you could use one of your other pictures for the cover image.

Any suggestions as I don't think that I will be able to get a poster made for this?

Is there any of these that I could use? https://www.facebook.com/media/set/?set=a.247772928284255&type=3

I don’t have Facebook, so it won’t let me enlarge all of the pictures, Slt Armstrong, but one of them should work.

That's a nice picture, Slt Armstrong, but I don’t think it represents your series well. From your logline and the book summary, it sounds like your series is a Sci-Fi Action story. I suggest using a picture that looks like Sci-Fi Action.

What about this? https://www.gofundme.com/f/funding-to-help-edit-my-green-girl-book

Yeah, that picture looks like Sci-Fi Action, Slt Armstrong.

Thank you what happens now?

Two more things, Slt Armstrong:

#1) Add a paragraph break between the first two paragraphs in the Series Summary section.

#2) I think it'd help if you added a few more pictures to the page.

Which pieces of artwork?

The pictures that look like Sci-Fi Action, Slt Armstrong.

What do you think? https://www.gofundme.com/f/funding-to-help-edit-my-green-girl-book

Looks better, Slt Armstrong. I suggest putting your video before the pictures.

Ok is this video OK?

Yeah, I think the video is fine, Slt Armstrong.

https://www.gofundme.com/f/funding-to-help-edit-my-green-girl-book

You asked me "what happens now?," Slt Armstrong. After you're satisfied with your campaign page, promotion it in the Your Stage Lounge (www.stage32.com/lounge/promotion) and on Your Wall here on Stage 32. And promote it on Twitter. I'll repost your campaign on Twitter.

Yes I am happy with this now

Sounds great, Slt Armstrong. I'll try to donate when I'm able.

Thank you Maurice

You're welcome, Slt Armstrong. It's 1:15 here, so I'm gonna get some sleep. Have a great weekend.

you too

Thanks, Slt Armstrong.