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Title: LBL
Set in the year 999AD
Logline:
For 30 days Cherokee Indian, Sleeping Owl must survive in the LBL (Land between the lakes) that is full of human eating, hunting, and possessing creatures to become a warrior in his tribe.
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You better put in why he's the only one who is sent there. Otherwise the camp can't be that hard to survive. The tribe's education can't be killing most of their own warriors.
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Whats the hook from another survival movie?
The movie PREY is basically the same plot but the hook is the Predator.
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Sure, here's an improved version of your logline:
"To become a warrior in his tribe, Cherokee Indian Sleeping Owl must survive 30 perilous days in the Land Between the Lakes, a territory teeming with human-eating, hunting, and possessing creatures."
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Mark Deuce Hey Mark!
Here's my take on this: To survive in his homeland, a determined Cherokee Indian must face many obstacles that come with a large price.
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To become a warrior in his tribe, a Cherokee Indian must survive being hunted for 30 days across a treacherous landscape full of human eating and possessing creatures.
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Try this - "A young warrior is sent out into the wilds for a month to prove his skill and bravery to the tribe, only to find that these woods hold a secret that turns the hunter into the hunted."
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Thank you to all for your amazing feedback!! It was invaluable.
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I love your logline Anthony Moore & Marcel Nault Jr. & Pat Alexander really appreciate your feedback.