I've just uploaded the first 20 pages of my feature comedy screenplay I'm starting to rewrite now. I wanted to see if anyone would like to provide me any comments that could help me while I figure out the direction I should focus on. Thanks! Logline: After her husband flees from the mob, a woman unwittingly becomes responsible for his strip club and dancer girlfriend.
Screenwriting : My First 20 Pages by John Ryan Kelmer
My First 20 Pages
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I just posted a silly comment on your wall. I live in Tampa too. I'm from London. Any road up as we say, I'm going to take a look at your first 20 pages and get back with you in a couple of days. I'm no expert on giving feedback by any means, but I'm so deep into screenwriting I hope I'll be able to help.