After a long month of restructuring and deletion, my script is finally in an acceptable form. Now, all I need is a few people who wouldn't mind to read it and give some creative critical analysis of it. It's currently at 134 pages. That's down from 276. If you would like to assist in this, please message me with your email; so I can get it to you as soon as possible. If you accept this, I will need your review by Feb 28 at 11:59pm EST. The more readers, the better. I can offer you "script editor" credit and some tangible item like a poster, soundtrack, or the like if you want. Thanks for your interest and assistance.
Screenwriting : Needed: script reviewers by Sebastian Butler II
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Well done Sebastian. However, you need to get it down to under 120 pages. I would advise down to 90-100 if you can.
I'll try but I think I need others opinons as what to cut since I cut as much as I could personally
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If you want to email me the first five pages. i will probably be able to tell you what the issue is. Why does it have to be done by the 28th?
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I down to read it
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Email me at dsears021594@gmail.com. Im down to help you out.
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Send it to frank@gotanideaforamovie.com
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Emai me at mbolekaja@yahoo.com
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Email me at aquaden@gmail.com . I've been a script reader for about a year. I'd be happy to help.
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I'm game to offer my advice - paulmac708@gmail.com - I also have a script I could do with fine tuning if anyone would be willing to help
Many thanks Christopher it's much appreciated - I'll send it next time I'm at my computer - If I can help you out in any way just let me know how.
Quick query: are any of you interested in a re-read of the edited script once I complete it? Like this if you are. No pressure.
Yes, madam. genre: romantic, sci-fi title: forbidden and Unbreakable (working) logline: A love must be strong no matter what. (working)
That's not a logline, it's a theme.
Oh thanks. I didn't know.
Edited: Working logline Two socially awkward individuals must believe in themselves and their budding romance in order to show their environment that true love is real and exists.
Well, its better but still not a real log line. you need actual Plot details not just vague innuendo. Honestly, I can already tell the script needs a good amount if work. I'd be happy to help, and can probably cut another 25 pages. But I don't do script analysis for free... feel free to check my profile page of my site out at www.nobullscript.net.
thanks. ill take a look at your site and get back to you when the newer, rewritten script is completed
You logline needs to sum up your entire script in about two sentences. It has to give enough information to peak someone's interest. Go to IMDB and read the loglines of movies similar to yours or popular movies, good movies.