Greetings, fellow Stagers. I was hoping to get some opinions on the logline for my latest feature, a coming-of-age tale set in small-town America. "When a pair of thirteen-year-old boys stumble onto the trail of an ancient source of extraterrestrial power, their quest to find the sacred object attracts the attention of a shadowy figure who will stop at nothing to uncover the relic first."
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Sounds intriguing and interesting. It certainly picked my curiosity. Good luck with it!
Thank you, Linda!
Interesting but a bit long. Loglines should be about 25 words.
Good thought. It does need trimmed down.
Teen boys battle a quasi-governmental agency for possession of an alien artifact hidden in the Great Smoky mountains.
Much better!!!
Thank you all. The input is always helpful!
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FOOD FOR THOUGHT: "When a pair of thirteen-year-old boys stumble onto the trail of an ancient source of extraterrestrial power, a shadowy figure is determined to stop at nothing to uncover the relic first."