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By B.D. Reid
After a nighttime study session in the library, a bookworm packs up to leave only to fear that he may not be alone.
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I like the first part of your logline, B.D. Reid ("After a nighttime study session in the library, a bookworm packs up to leave"). I think the second part is vague ("only to fear that he may not be alone"). I suggest adding the story goal and stakes instead of "only to fear that he may not be alone."