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THE UNHINGED TUTOR
By Trina Jackson
Matthew Johnson is a fun loving friendly math tutor at a fictional HBCU school named Thomas Atkinson University. Matthew is a wiz at math and willing to tutor any student. There is just one thing, Don't disappoint Matthew with your grades. If you know what's best for you, you better make an A or else it could cost you your life!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
SYNOPSIS:
Matthew Johnson is a math tutor at the fictional HBCU called Thomas
Atkinson University located in a fictional city called Abina,Georgia.
Matthew is considered one of the best tutors that the university has to
offer. Matthew becomes friends with these students named Tarik, Durrell,
and Monica. They form a friendship and eventually Matthew become
Monica's boyfriend.Matthew seems like a cool and fun friend to hang
with. There is just one thing, They have no idea that Matthew has a dark
side. While tutoring the students, they also at the same time, end up
dead. There is a serial campus killer on the loose. Is Matthew the
killer? Will his friends soon find out what type of person Matthew
really is or will they be able to stop Matthew if he really is the
serial campus killer!!!!!!
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Unique Horror story, Trina Jackson. Your logline reads more like a short synopsis. Here's a logline template that might help you:
"After ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the protagonist with an adjective) tries/attempts to _______ (goal of story) so ________ (stakes)."
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Thank you Maurice. I will do that next time.
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Hey, Trina! I agree with Maurice, your story does sound original and unique. I believe the thing here is we only have the bad guy in the story (Matthew, the math tutor). Is there a student on Thomas Atkinson University who's particularly important in the story (protagonist)? Because generally, the inciting incident happens to the protagonist.
You're welcome, Trina Jackson.
There really is no protagonist. You can say the protagonist are Matthew's friends, Durrell, Tarik, and Monica. This screenplay basically is about the campus serial killer killing students regarding their grades.
Matthew is the campus serial killer and he is killing the students that he tutors over grades that are not A's. Once Matthew's friends find out that he is the campus killer, they try to stop him from killing other students on campus.
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TBHWY(to be honest with you) I could really use a film mentor. That is what I really need. I am just a rookie and this is my second script that I've written so far.
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