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THE WORKER AND THE HITCHHIKER: AN HOMAGE TO COMMUNISM (SCREENPLAY AND PART OF A SELF-PUBLISHED BOOK)
By PolyD Flynt

GENRE: Drama, Crime
LOGLINE:

When two hipsters pick up a harmless mentally ill hitchhiker in their stolen VW van, they decide to enter a strange rural town, which turns out to be murder twilight zone. The chaotic violence that torments its various citizens is intensified, as we learn more about the townspeople and their relationships.

SYNOPSIS:

the book:

Focus Thought Revolution

part one: the story a neo-noir short chiller fiction.

part two: 7 chapters of poetic neo-punk, neo-noir, hipster poetic philosophy.

the screenplay

as is.

Excerpt from a review of the short fiction/screenplay:

“The story starts with Abe, Mileene and Anderson. There is a certain foreshadowing that The Worker and the Hitchhiker: an homage to communism, is set to become a road trip story, but the indication is a red herring at its very best. The narrative goes to two other places; Gem, who will meet the trio at one point, and Kent, who will stay as a minor character until the end. Gem’s storyline indulges the flashbacks, and as soon as the story hits the second act, it concentrates entirely on Fairnighl and her.

The writer's solid and authentic narrative voice could be seen in many things, starting with the play with time and space. The storytelling jumps forward and backwards, and it doesn’t want to pay special attention to the passage of time and space identity. The audience is left to perceive the dimensions differently, reflecting their life experience upon the film and its heroes and heroines.”

The writer likes to explore morbid details in setting and action, introverted and cerebral drama, the ugliness of 90's sexism, misanthropy, lethargy and the mundane. But also, sex, violence and transcendental psychedelics, magic and faith, ambition, pain, the psychology – dismantling, dissection and analysis of minds, processes, creations and actions. Love, philosophy, the subjects of argument, debate and intellectual dialogue. Death, hatred, loss, the divide between hope and reason, delusions, destiny and dreams. Gods and monsters. Villains and rejects.

“The writer gives a reference to Lynch at one point, when there is a question of the fake movie that plays in Fairnighl’s apartment. The film is supposed to be something like Tarantino meets Lynch, and that's precisely the meta-reference that addresses the script's reader and not the future audience. The audience would acknowledge the Lynchian vibes and Kafkaesque pandemic through the visuals.

This script is first and foremost a magnanimous visual experience. The editor and colourist of this film would have to showcase their best skills and talents in order to capture the script’s essence. The sharp ellipsis, the sometimes-cartoonish characters and the juxtaposition of elements inside the scenes make The Worker and the Hitchhiker an intense cinematic journey.”

Excerpt from another review:

“With its ensemble of diverse characters, utter lack of restraint in regard to explicit content, unconventional use of voice-over narration and numerous plot lines, ‘The Worker and the Hitchhiker’ stands out as a bold and original script with the potential to provoke both thought and discussion.

Comparable at times to the work of David Lynch, an undoubtable highlight of the piece is its uncomfortable and foreboding tone, supported by the horrific violence the writer wastes little time in presenting early on, which lends meaning and suspense to the everything that follows. Indeed, the ambiguity and absurdity of the gorilla suited character, along with the shocking and sudden brutality of Amanda’s murdering, create a potent lasting impression as well as a constant sense of threat that carries through every subsequent scene.”

In short, this is what my story is about: A disturbed young man meets two free spirits and they go on an adventure into a murder twilight zone. The zone is characterised by its surreal violence and after experiencing that, we go back to learn about the characters in the story and how their lives have been impacted by the violence. The ending is weirdly cheerful, although the main characters are dead, the deceased Abe begins a somewhat absurd friendship with Fairnighl.

theme: like Sweet Tooth

format: like Love, Death and Robots meets Stranger Things

Writing/Visual Style: like a cocktail of Douglas Coupland, Harry Sinclair, Geoff Murphy, John Boorman, and Love and a .45.

Maurice Vaughan

I think your logline needs to be tighten up, PolyD Flynt. I also think "The story is not driven by time" should go in the synopsis and/or pitch instead of the logline.

Here's a logline template that might help:

After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (an adjective and the protagonist's position/role) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/participates/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story) so/in order to ________ (stakes).”

The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: “A _______ (an adjective and the protagonist's position/role) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/participates/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story) so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).”

PolyD Flynt

Thanks!

Maurice Vaughan

You're welcome, PolyD Flynt.

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