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A military agent penetrates a gangs headquarters disguised as a Nun to help take out their leader while also helping a young boy named Tyler escape his forced affiliation with the dangerous group.
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A military agent penetrates a gangs headquarters disguised as a Nun to help take out their leader while also helping a young boy named Tyler escape his forced affiliation with the dangerous group.
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An undercover agent disguised as a nun penetrates a gangs headquaters and helps to take out their leader, while helping a boy that is in need along the way.
What we still miss is the inciting incident and the stakes.
After/when x happens, .....
Maybe akso describe the boy's "need" in one or two words.
Now you simply make a longer synopsis.
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