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When a home invasion turns their house into a prison, a desperate young mother and father must use their wits and willpower to overcome their captors if their family is to survive the night.
WHILE THERE'S LIFE, THERE'S HOPE
#LifeOrDeath #KillOrBeKilled
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Great logline Kenneth Michael Daniels and how about this one?
When a brutal home invasion traps a young mother and father in their own house, they must rely on cunning and courage to outwit their captors and ensure their family survives the harrowing night of terror.
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The tricky thing is that half the film is set outside of the house. I have yet to come up with a good way to describe the overall plot without it getting needlessly complicated. The important thing is that these are average people, so there is no kung fu involved, but instead just desperate parents trying to save themselves so that they can save their loved ones.
And the bad guys are meant to be sort of in over their heads. There are three of them: one a sadist who's keen on violence, one motivated by money alone who is willing to turn a blind eye to get it, and one who thought it was just going to be an in-and-out robbery who has issues with where it's headed.
So, in the basic sense it's just another home invasion film, but it is meant to stand apart by operating in a moral gray area with a fair amount of cat-and-mouse nuance.
Plus, the father is an AI developer, so the house is kinda a character too, as it is an extension of his secret prototype User Interface (think Siri or Alexa, but not a dimwit), which ties in to the plot as the device I use to get a couple of the characters out of the house. It worked out nicely since I can build tension and then do mini cliffhangers when I bounce back and forth between the mom and the dad each taking on their respective bad guys, all the while not having any idea how things are going for one another.
Anyway, thanks for the alternate logline. If this additional info helps you to think of a different approach, I'd appreciate hearing it. TIA!
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You just explained it perfectly Kenneth Michael Daniels
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Sounds like a very well constructed story