Hi Francisco Castro As I eluded to in your other logline, I would encourage specific stakes and goals for the characters. There are many questions left unanswered here. What is the goal of the protagonist? What is the inciting incident in the story? What are the stakes if they don't accomplish their goal?

Here's a great template for loglines that may help:

“After ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (an adjective and the protagonist's position/role) tries to _______ (goal of story) so/in order to ________ (stakes).”

Hope this helps.