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In New York City, a grieving post-grad history student uncovers her late mother’s hidden past, forcing her to confront buried truths and redefine her own identity.
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Olivia Knight, grieving the death of her historian mother, Amelia, finds a cryptic letter hinting at a hidden life. She is also navigating her relationship with her girlfriend, artist Christina Roth. Driven to understand Amelia, Olivia investigates her mother's research on the Harlem riots, uncovering a potential CIA connection to Liberty Hall.
With Christina's support, they discover evidence of "Project Lunar Effect," a conspiracy targeting the Black Panther Party, possibly involving Amelia. Tensions arise as Olivia grapples with the implications. Reconciling after a painful fight, they resolve to face the truth together.
Researching further, they are led to the Striver's Legacy Museum where they learn about Clay Brooks, a young activist Amelia worked with. They access Liberty Hall and uncover clues that lead them to Clay's grave, where Amelia’s letter reveals a romantic and complicated connection.
Olivia realizes her mother’s history was more complex than she imagined and it involved a need to protect the movement, with the potential of losing Clay along the way. Olivia and Christina vow to honor the past and build a better future, completing Amelia's legacy by rebuilding Liberty Hall.
The film culminates with the restored Liberty Hall's opening as a community center. As they embrace the possibilities for the future, Olivia and Christina's relationship strengthens, ready to face whatever comes next.
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Marcel Nault Jr., try making your logline more concise. The single, forty-six word sentence with two "buts" feels like it's rambling. I always shoot for loglines thirty-five words or less. Ask yourself if mentioning NYU is important. The same for what follows the second "but;" could it be summarized in one or two active words. Looking forward to the next iteration!
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Much tighter and engaging, Marcel Nault Jr. Should "...but a terrible cost" read "...but at a terrible cost."?
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Right... small typo on my part. Thanks for noticing it, Ty.
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I agree with Ty. It needs some punch to do this story justice. It's a good storyline.
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The logline has me interested to see more. Curious demise, or suspicious demise?
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This sounds interesting, Marcel Nault Jr. (I love mysterious), but I think the last part of your logline is vague ("but at a terrible cost").
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