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JUMPING THE JACK
By Clayton Emery
In space, things can always get worse... Sam and Hannah, husband/wife starship engineers, shipwreck on a long-lost space station called "The Jack". They soon learn it's antiquated, crumbling, and ready to fly apart. Desperate to save it, they dodge xenophobic locals, dangerous aliens, and killer robots, slapping patches where they can. Until Space Marines invade and trigger disaster. With the Jack shaking to pieces, and everyone hunting their heads, Sam and Hannah cobble a last-ditch plan with one tiny hitch: everyone must cooperate - or everyone dies.
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In space, things can always get worse... Sam and Hannah, husband/wife
starship engineers, are shipwrecked on a long-lost space station called
"The Jack". They soon learn it's antiquated, crumbling, and ready to
fly apart. Desperate, they dodge xenophobic locals, dangerous aliens,
and killer robots, slapping patches where they can. Until Space Marines
invade and trigger disaster. With the Jack shaking to pieces, and
everyone hunting their heads, Sam and Hannah cobble a last-ditch plan
with one tiny hitch: everyone must cooperate - or everyone dies.
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Hi, Clayton Emery. Your logline is actually a tagline (a short, catchy phrase like you would see on a poster).
Here’s a logline template that might help:
“After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the main flaw that the main character has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the main character’s personality) _______ (the main character’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes).”
The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: “A _______ (the main flaw that the main character has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the main character’s personality) _______ (the main character’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).”
And Christopher Lockhart has a great webinar on loglines. It’s called “How To Make Your Logline Attractive to A-List Actors, Producers, Directors, Managers, Agents, Financiers and Development Execs” (www.stage32.com/webinars/How-To-Make-Your-Logline-Attractive-to-A-List-A...).