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THE DARK RAINBOW

THE DARK RAINBOW
By Isabelle Duval

GENRE: Thriller
LOGLINE: When 50% of your DNA comes from a psychopath!

SYNOPSIS:

A French inspector passing through Boston finds herself two days later in the middle of an investigation whose first indications confront her with her past. Using their skills in physics, chemistry, medicine and herbal medicine, antagonists will use patients hospitalized for specific conditions to extract hydrochloric acid. Their purpose? Making a new drug called Rainbow. But, it is only a lure to gain control of Charlotte so that she will psychologically break down and reveal her darkest side. They want her to join them to fulfill the purpose of the one who hides behind this plan that he has established for many years. Messages, disturbing pictures will be found at every crime scene and with the help of James and Steve, ignoring certain protocols to stop this murderous madness, she will understand that the worst is yet to come. Klaus Wentz said: “Wherever the serpent goes, a God precedes it!” Charlotte will have to understand the origins and especially those of the Ngalyod, the rainbow serpent her mother loved so much. He'll be constantly at crime scenes, reminding her how passionate her son was about them. The discovery of family secrets and unsustainable lies will cast doubt on Charlotte's credibility. How to react when a father thought dead is finally one of the most wanted psychopaths and suddenly two triplets come out of the blue? Doubts and questions will weigh on her shoulders, forcing her to question the honesty of her family. Who is corrupt in this story in which Eliott was used as bait, and how far can a man’s wickedness go when he is willing to do anything?

Marcos Fizzotti

Hello Isabelle, that's surely a very intriguing and interesting concept. Could you please add a few more details (protagonist, inciting incident, stakes)?

Marcos Fizzotti

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Rutger Oosterhoff

Hi Isabelle,

Interesting synopsis/story (line). I have a ? Genes -over- upbringing? story myself called Serial Twins.

What you have right now as a logline is actually a Tagline. First thing to do now is to come up with (a) a series logline and (b) a pilot's logline; thrn make them part of your Bible.

About the Synopsis:

There is nothing clearly stating that Charlotte is the inspector.

Maybe start like this:

Charlotte X (full name), a French inspector passing through...

Also I see no clear 'described' relation between Charlotte and the other characters/names in your synopsis.

All easy fixes.

Tasha Lewis

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