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BLOOD BROTHERS
By Bobby G
In the shadowy realm of the Yakuza, lifelong friends Jimmy and Shinji, both harboring deep affection for an orphan girl from their past, find their loyalties tested as they navigate a perilous world of betrayal, corruption, and power struggles. The stakes are raised when their shared romantic interest becomes a pawn in a dangerous game, forcing the two friends into a deadly clash for leadership, where the bonds of brotherhood may be severed by the allure of power and love.
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"Blood Ties"
Jimmy, a half-Japanese, half-American orphan, and Shinji, a quiet and steadfast companion and also orphan, grew up with the orphan girl Yuki, forming an inseparable trio. As they matured, the friends found themselves drawn into the criminal underworld of the Yakuza. Yuki, unknowingly caught in the crossfire, becomes a target when their enemies exploit the brothers' romantic feelings for her.
In a world filled with deadly betrayals, crooked police, and rival clans, Jimmy and Shinji rise through the ranks, fueled by a desire to protect Yuki. However, their unbreakable bond is strained when a twist of fate pits them against each other in a ruthless struggle for sole leadership of their Yakuza clan.
As Yuki becomes a pawn in a dangerous game orchestrated by their enemies, the two friends must confront not only the allure of power but also the complex emotions tied to their shared love for her. The criminal underworld becomes a battleground where loyalty, love, and ambition collide, leading to a heartbreaking conflict that threatens to tear apart the bonds of brotherhood.
"Blood Ties" explores the limits of friendship and love in the face of ambition and power, posing the question of whether the deep connection between Jimmy and Shinji, forged in their shared past, can withstand the brutal demands of the Yakuza lifestyle or if it will ultimately lead to their tragic downfall and the loss of the one they both hold dear.
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The logline is much too long but very cool story!
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Amazing Story! I was in the army for 3 years and thanks for your service!
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find a way to condense the logline. tighten it up. :)
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I agree with Rutger Oosterhoff the logline is way too long, but the story sounds fantastic!
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Interesting concept, Bobby G! Your logline is really long though. 80 words. It's more of a short synopsis.
Here’s a logline template that might help: After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the main flaw that the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes).
The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: A _______ (the main flaw that the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).
Loglines are one or two sentences. A one-sentence logline sounds better, and it takes less time for a producer, director, etc. to read it. Try to keep your logline to 35 words or less.
Avoid using “must” in loglines. “Must” usually means the protagonist is forced to do whatever they need to do in the story instead of doing it willingly. You might need to use “must” in a logline though, like when the protagonist is forced by another character to do something.
Names in loglines are usually for biopics, well-known stories, and franchises (like Mission: Impossible).
Sometimes I put the location and date that the story takes place in instead of the inciting incident if it’s a Period Piece script.
All stories don't follow this logline template. Biopics, documentaries, and Experimental scripts might not follow the template. The series logline for a TV show can follow this template, but the pilot logline and episode loglines for the show might not.
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