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LOGLINE: Pilot Episode Logline: Frankie tells police about an upcoming bank robbery so they plan to catch them in the act but the robbers get away!
SERIES LOGLINE: After being set up by cohorts and arrested, a drug smuggling mechanic decides to help a local police detective put more criminals behind bars, as long as she can avoid retaliation in her criminal underworld.
SYNOPSIS:
Episode One: 211 in Progress, first of two parts:
An experienced mechanic, Frankie fixes many people’s cars, but the girls living a few streets away from her family pull her in a new direction when she begins working on their cars and ultimately repairs the leaders’ cars. At the request of Troya and Marciana, the girl gang leaders, and armed with her own expertise, Frankie steals the vehicles they want from various parking lots around the county. They pay her 500.00 for each car. With one seemingly careless question, Frankie finds out the gang uses the stolen cars to rob banks. She then goes to the police and informs them that the next robbery will take place the following day, Saturday morning.
Aware of the violent nature of past robberies, the police set up an operation to catch the gang in the act. At the direction of the police, Frankie steals another car and participates in the robbery as the getaway driver. It should have been simple: catch and arrest the gang in the middle of a 211 in progress. This first episode ends as the bank robbers evade capture. (The second half, when the gang is captured and put on trial, with Frankie testifying, will air at the end of the season.)
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Thank you, so much. I can't believe I only just saw this!
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