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Alicia Pozsony battles against a backdrop of prejudice, racism, love, loss, trauma, and her mother's schizophrenia. Trapped in her mother's tumultuous world, Alicia must navigate the treacherous terrain of trying to please her mother while also finding her own path to happiness. Will she find the strength to rise above her circumstances and forge her own destiny, or will she remain yearning for connection ensnared in her mother's hell, or will she find freedom?
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Based on a True Story. An inspiring memoir-style narrative set in New Jersey during the tumultuous decades of the 70s and 80s, continuing into the present day. This story is based on the true story of Alicia Pozsony’s life, portraying the challenges she faced while growing up—a leaf tossed by the winds of change. She paints a vivid picture of the profound impact of her courageous journey, surviving the painful yet beautiful existence alongside a mentally ill mother who struggled to find stability. Amidst it all, hope and grace prevail.
This poignant tale follows an American girl's path through the perils of adolescence, navigating the treacherous waters of prejudice, racism, love, loss, rape, depression, anxiety, panic, her mother's schizophrenia, and the unknown. Trapped in her mother's personal hell, she wrestles with the desperate desire to make her mother happy while trying to strike a delicate balance with her own needs. Will she be able to save her mother or rise above her circumstances and break free from the profound loneliness that engulfs her?
As she tries to help her mother attain some comfort and serenity within, she also reminisces about the personal struggles of Roberta, her mother, and how she grew up in an extremely harsh environment lacking love, empathy, and support. She talks about her upbringing in a family where she was unwanted and treated like an outsider. Her mother deemed her existence as a mistake and always made her feel unwanted until she found a guy and ran away with him. It is with him, she conceived Alicia.
Running parallel to the primary narrative is the story of how she discovered solace in faith—a steadfast anchor guiding her through life's relentless changes. From the perspective of a healed adult, she recounts her journey of growth beyond the influence of her mother's struggles, ultimately achieving an extraordinary triumph as a damaged individual who found wholeness. By breaking free from the wind tunnel of dysfunction and escaping the labyrinth of survival, she attains the ultimate gift of peace that accompanies the victorious conquest of personal battles.
Thank you, @Tasha Lewis! May I ask why not a 5? What was missing or incorrect?
I will say it's not a 5 because the elegance of the writing literally shadows the story. How do we finding "serenity, solace, & faith" without anybody else but the lead and the problem? Maybe execute plot points better. The second paragraph is biggest problem where you list what this movie is about then ask us a question about your story. It's not grabbing enough, you're asking me engage at that point we turn off. The person you pitch too might look dumb founded you asked a rhetorical question because you will begin to talk seconds later. If you want to strengthen you pitch start with a DM. I will warn you I'm a producer. I don't TRY to sell scripts at the moment, but I know what a movie should look like.
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In my humble opinion, this could be a different version of your Logline. And I am not comfortable in allocating stars.
A young girl battles prejudice, trauma, and her mother's schizophrenia. She navigates a treacherous terrain of trying to please her mother as she finds her own path to happiness.Rated this logline
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