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A young man, desperate to pay for his dying mother's cancer treatment, attempts to rob a corrupt billionaire.
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Jesse Brooks is a young man, struggling to save his dying mother as medical bills pile up. With no options left, he decides to take matters into his own hands. He sets his sights on billionaire Vincent Duvall, a powerful figure who's fortune was built on corruption and greed.
One fateful night, Jesse makes his move outside Duvall's mansion where a confrontation unfolds that will change both of their lives forever. As tensions rise and sirens close in, Jesse is forced to face a devastating truth that will define his fate.
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It sounds like Breaking Point is going to be intense and gripping, Zech Elliott. The son is in a really tough spot. Your logline works, but I think the end could be stronger. A young man, desperate to pay for his dying mother's cancer treatment, attempts to rob a powerful billionaire whose fortune was built on corruption and greed.
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