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After an overwhelmed full-time party planner and married mother of three realizes she doesn't have the perfect family, she enlists a wounded female scientist's help and learns the real meaning of family.
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Janet, the wife of a work-a-holic husband, mother of a 15-year-old son, a 13-year-old daughter, a sixteen-month-old, and a full-time party planner, is beyond burnout. Although Janet is borderline obsessive with planning and scheduling, her family life in Jacksonville, Florida is noncohesive and in complete disarray. Janet's day starts with misplacing her keys and rushing yet again. The family dog, who eats everything but his dog food, vomits and poops under the kitchen table. Now, Janet's teenagers are late for their preppy school. Next, a by-the-book principal belittles Janet and tells her that working mothers can't have everything. Janet sees the light in her dark tunnel of despair after meeting Harietta, a wounded scientist, at the grocery store. Harietta confirms that mothers can have the balance they seek and offers to help Janet. Later that day, Janet learns her criticizing mother-in-law is coming to live with them for six- weeks. Then, Janet finds a boy's phone number in her thirteen-year-old daughter's belongings. Out of desperation, to gain control of her current circumstances, Janet enlists Harrietta's help. Harietta creates a duplicate of Janet, but the clone lasts only four weeks. When everyone, including her boss, sees how well she manages her life, Janet receives additional responsibilities, including hosting a huge Thanksgiving dinner for her company. Unbeknownst to Harrietta, Janet orders five more clones. On the night of the Thanksgiving dinner, Janet realizes that her clones are aging faster. Janet's Thanksgiving dinner is a disaster, and the whole town discovers that Janet is not the mother she appears to be. Finally, Janet redeems herself by throwing a family-inspired Christmas party, setting the stage for truly maximizing her family's talents.
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Did you mean to say that the mother-in-law moving in is a fiasco? If so, you are asking the reader to do the work. That means relying on stereotypes of mothers in law. Why is her particular mother in law a problem? Not all are bad. What is the significance of the scientist being wounded? If it can’t be answered succinctly in the logline, I don’t think it should be included. Other people may feel otherwise.
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