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After a sponsor's challenge, Zeke and his friends rush to finish their BMX video. Along the way, he faces an emotional encounter with his estranged father and a shift with his crush Sofia, pushing him to confront his past and take a bold shot at his dreams.
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Sounds like a fun script, Zac Decker And great title!
I only have two suggestions for your logline:
#1) Add the teenager's main flaw that he overcomes in the script or add an adjective that describes his personality.
#2) Take out "in this heartfelt coming-of-age comedy." I think your logline sounds better without that part, and your logline will be shorter (43 words with that part, and 38 words without it).
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Maurice Vaughan Love it, thank you!
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You're welcome, Zac Decker. I'd watch this!
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