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YOU OWE ME!
By Brittany Mack

GENRE: Thriller, Drama
LOGLINE: In a tangled web of tragedy, betrayal, and chaos, seven old acquaintances unite to uncover the mystery behind their turmoil and prevent an unknown adversary from destroying all they hold dear.
Sam Iwata Aka Liu

I find this logline a bit vague. At this moment, I don't think "tragedy, betrayal, and chaos" are the key to hook the audience. Instead, "What makes the seven old acquaintances reunite?" and "What was their relationship before?" will interest me more.

Therefore, I suggest something like this:

After many years, seven "RELATIONSHIP" friends are forced to reunite when a mysterious adversary threatens to reveal their darkest secrets and destroy all they hold dear.

I hope it helps.

Lisa Lee

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Lisa Lee

I agree with Sam Iwata Aka Liu it does feel a bit vague.

Tasha Lewis

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