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TAKE ME TO YOUR LOSER
By Justin Woolley
In 1982, ten-year-old Henry Norton encountered an Extra-Terrestrial in the forest near his home. Now, thirty years later, nobody believes a word of his story and Henry, a down and out truck driver, spends his spare time travelling the UFO circuit. But when those aliens return in a full-scale invasion Henry is the only one able to communicate with them. He is forced to step in as Earth’s ambassador and attempt to negotiate a way out of our first interstellar ass-kicking.
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Fantastic title and concept, Justin Woolley!
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The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: A _______ (the main flaw that the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).
Loglines are one or two sentences. A one-sentence logline sounds better, and it takes less time for a producer, director, etc. to read it. Try to keep your logline to 35 words or less.
Names in loglines are usually for biopics, well-known stories, and franchises (like “Mission: Impossible”).
Sometimes I put the location and date that the story takes place in instead of the inciting incident if it’s a Period Piece script.