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In a world where the stars have faded and darkness devours all life, a band of unlikely heroes—from young boy Eol to ancient alchemist Lirric—must unite to defeat the shaman Tsodag and destroy the Gray Haven, restoring the light of the stars before their world is consumed by eternal night.
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"Between Light and Darkness" is an epic fantasy about hope, unity, and redemption in a world where the stars have vanished, and darkness threatens to consume all life. A group of disparate heroes—a young fisherman Eol (13), gifted with the ability to see magical daylight berries, ancient alchemist Lirric, whose past is tied to the rise of darkness, blacksmith-king Niomir (40s), hiding his royal lineage, shamanic outcast Ilif (25–30), driven by vengeance, siblings Tin (15) and Dana (13), seeking justice, scholars Lucius (50s), Lyra (19), and Akston, hungry for knowledge, and interdimensional traveler Tiana (20s), who opens portals—come together to defeat the shaman Tsodag and destroy the Gray Haven, the source of the eternal night, to bring back the stars.
In a small village, young Droga (17) witnesses the last star vanish from the sky, accompanied by an ominous hum that signals impending doom. His brother Eol discovers a golden table with glowing daylight berries but loses it while saving their sister Nira (10) from a flooding river. In an abandoned academy, Lirric, a centuries-old alchemist, creates an elixir that rejuvenates him, but shadows attack, reminding him of his past mistakes tied to the darkness. Teens Tin and Dana hunt a boar using the dangerous "Danric’s Frenzy" resin, only to be interrupted by the same eerie hum. Blacksmith Niomir sets out to find the kidnapped sons of Lord Brog, assembling a group: his son Ardan (19), Eol, Tin, Dana, and the enigmatic Ilif Otino, who is linked to the shaman Tsodag. Ilif, born in the Rafak Desert through a sacrificial ritual, bears scars from his past, where as a teen he resisted shamanic control and was saved by the mythical horned panthers led by Akini. In Flosford, young inventor Lyra sees a flash of light tied to Ilif’s birth, while her father Lucius defends a project involving daylight berries. Niomir’s group and Lucius’s team unite, setting off for Anarok Valley in Lyra’s mobile home, ready to confront the darkness.
On their journey to Green Grove, the group survives their first night in a forest, where Ilif protects them from rock bears, revealing his ability to see through darkness with glowing green eyes. In Green Grove, Niomir confronts Tran Haigrim (50s), a lord obsessed with retrieving his sons through dark rituals. Niomir reveals his royal lineage with a ring, the Nightslicer sword, and Arna’s Beacon crown, convincing Tran to join their mission. Eol demonstrates a magical plate that points to the source of light, earning Tran’s blessing for their quest. The group reaches a coastal lighthouse, where they encounter Tiana Wright, a keeper who can open portals. After a skirmish, Tiana joins them, opening a portal to Krenkialian—a ruined magical school. There, they meet Lirric, who recalls creating a table in his youth that accidentally turned a professor to stone. Lirric decides to join the group, vowing to protect Eol, Tin, and Dana despite Niomir’s concerns.
The group prepares to travel to Amanazi via Isikhlabad, knowing the land’s magic is unforgiving to intruders. Tiana opens a portal to Amanazi, where Ilif confronts Tsodag—the shaman who turns out to be his father. In a fierce battle, Ilif, aided by the panther Adongo, destroys Tsodag, whose death weakens the darkness. Niomir and Lirric venture into the Gray Haven, where Lirric faces shadows of his past—his old friends Henrik, Teneb, and Argen, now corrupted by darkness. After a brutal fight, Henrik, in a moment of remorse, unleashes light that shatters the Gray Haven. Stars pierce the sky for the first time in centuries, illuminating the world. The group returns to Krenkialian at dawn, where Lucius greets them with a smile: “You brought the stars back.” Laughter and unity among the heroes mark a new era of light, as the starry sky shines in the final frames.
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Your English is exceptional, Aleksey. How come? You studied English in Russia, or abroad? I'm curious.
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Hi Rutger Oosterhoff , thanks for the kind words and the rating — it means a lot! I studied English mostly on my own in Russia, through books, movies, and online courses, and I also trained as a linguist-translator, so that helped a lot. But my spoken English isn’t as good since I’ve had very little practice.
Since you liked my logline, could you share any tips on what I could tweak to get an even higher rating? I’d really appreciate your advice. What projects are you working on? I’d love to hear more. =)
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The basics of your logline are strong, Aleksey. It's a bit long but I don't really care. What catches the eye is that there is no clear protagonist in your logline,; it can be very hard to make a story work where there is no clear hero. When a logline contains a grouo of people lead by the protag, you often read "X and his/her Ragtag Bunch of Misfits" But it's very cliche.
Actually, with s holocaust project I'm still working on, "The Final Solution," I faced the same problem as you could have, although the logline says differently:
"After an SS officer's family is accidentally sent to Treblinka, he must save them before the commandant dismantles the camp and kills all inmates."
Alyhough yhf logline is solid, "inmates" isn't the right word here prisoners even worth, there dimlly idn't s right word.
About the protag, the logline states the father is the hero that saves the day, but reality dictates that the 'family unit' is the protag, and at the same time mum and dad are partly the antags, this screenllay looks for a scala of greys in between black and white.
That, I guess is what I'm doing when working on movie projects, looking for the interesting, mind provoking, greys. So, do I want to 'mindfuck people,?" No, I want to let them use all 86 billion nerve cells they have, instead of only one when it suits them.
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Aleksey Salikhov, your logline sets up a richly imagined fantasy world with high stakes and an epic tone. The imagery of fading stars and encroaching darkness immediately establishes urgency and atmosphere, while the mention of characters like Eol and Lirric suggests a diverse team with potential for compelling dynamics. The central antagonist and goal are clear, and the phrasing “restore the light of the stars” is evocative and poetic.
That said, the logline could be slightly tightened to avoid overloading the reader. Phrases like “darkness devours all life” and “consumed by eternal night” repeat similar ideas. Choosing one could enhance the clarity and impact.
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