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VAMPIRE TEACHER
By Janet Clarke
Four fifth grade friends are terrified when they begin to suspect their new teacher's a vampire. But when classmates start to vanish, the situation gets far worse! A Goosebump's style kid's horror, co-written with Chris Shamburger.
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Ooh that's sounds interesting. That's something young kids would like
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Hi Janet. This one does sound interesting, and I like your opening. Your second sentence, especially "the situation gets far worse" can use a little work. But when their classmates start to vanish, they realize they're up against something much more sinister - That's completely quick and off the top of my head, but I think you can see where I'm going. Also no need for the third sentence. You can save the comps for when you are in a room or writing a synopsis. Good luck with it!
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