THE STAGE 32 LOGLINES

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THE JIG IS UP
By Renée Brack

GENRE: Documentary, Comedy
LOGLINE:

He’s nervous about coming back the 2nd time and grants an exclusive interview with a journalist he likes who takes him on a shocking tour of the 21st century world he left behind.

Steven Blows

I would suggest not starting a logline with the word "he's". A logline is meant to tell me who the protagonist is and this normally happens first thing where you have used the word he's instead. None of the logline tells me who the protagonist is. It also assumes we have outside knowledge by assuming we know why this man left the 21st century and how. This is information the logline should tell us if it is key to the story. You will know best.

Tasha Lewis

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