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EDGE OF A BLACK MOON

EDGE OF A BLACK MOON
By Emma Cavalier

GENRE: Thriller, Drama
LOGLINE:

Returning to a fractured home, a troubled young woman dealing with addiction fights to create her new path, while a dangerous force threatens her world.

SYNOPSIS:

Mia mourns her father's death not long after losing her biological mother who was a talented but suicidal artist. She resents her stepmother Renee for taking her home - father, sister, and house - from her. She doesn't trust Renee.

Mia kidnaps her younger sister Ella and takes off in Renee's car. One year later she's still on probation for her crimes.

Having sought refuge with her boyfriend Jake, a drug user in debt, she learns that she has put her trust in the wrong person. He sells her out to his dealer Whiro who rapes her at a party.

Scared and fed up with her dirty dead-end life, she asks Renee for another chance. She moves back into the house and tries to repair the relationships with her stepmother and sister.

Renee notices Mia's artistic talent and offers her free space at her studio where she can work on her art. With this support structure it looks like a way up and out for Mia. However, Mia's street life follows her home and endangers what's left of her

family. Whiro stalks her obsessively and intimidates her for money owed.

An attempt to seek help from the police reveals that one of Mia’s arresting officers from the year prior has a corrupt connection to Whiro. Finally cornered, Whiro assaults Mia again, threatens her little sister, and ends up burning down the studio. Renee’s friend and business partner Joan is injured when she arrives on the scene and tries to save precious paintings made by the girls’ biological mother.

This is the last straw for Mia. She goes to the police and risks her own future, confessing her drug involvement, in order to protect her family from Whiro. Before the police can get to Whiro and the corrupt officer involved, he is killed by an unknown assailant. Renee sells the house so they can all move on from the painful memories and start fresh in a new home.

Another year later, Mia is seen living in the new house Renee had purchased for herself and the girls. Recovered from her injuries, Joan is there spiking a volleyball back and forth with Ella. On her arm, Mia has a Whiro skull tattoo mirroring the one that he had on his neck. The question that no one has asked is revealed to the audience, did Mia kill Whiro?

Derek C. Block

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Derek C. Block

I don't know if this helps you in anyway, but it seems that a phrase like, "a dangerous force threatens her world" can come across as a sci-fi or fantasy logline. If someone didn't have the benefit of having read your synopsis, they may not know what the story is about. I put together an example that might provide some ideas to you, please work with it if you find it helpful at all: "Returning to a fractured home, a troubled young woman battling addiction finds herself struggling to find love, forgiveness, and acceptance as she tries to keep her life from spiraling out of control."

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Maurice Vaughan

Great logline, Derek C. Block!

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