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SANTA'S DELIVERY
By Arthur Charpentier
When two teenage bullies try to rob Santa Claus, he turns them into snowmen. Now the heroes must fulfill the norm of delivering gifts to children in order to return their human bodies and not melt after the holiday.
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The idea of the film is based on my story - December 30th.
I want to write this story in the spirit of the film A Christmas Story, but in a modern setting and reflecting the current problems of youth.
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Arthur Charpentier , this looks like fun. I love the idea of bullies getting comeuppance from Santa. I was a little confused by the logline. Is it supposed to be a real Santa? Also, "Before they melt and die when the holiday is over" sounds like they're destined to melt and die before the holiday is over. WHat do yu think of something like:
When two bully students (teenage bullies? middle school?) try to rob Santa Claus, he turns them into snowmen. In a race against the clock, they grapple to fulfill his command to deliver gifts or melt into obscurity.
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Robin Gregory, thank you so much for your feedback. You are absolutely right, the heroes meet the real Santa Claus and they must complete the task so as not to melt after the holiday. Your version of the logline describes the idea of the script much better.
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So glad to be of help, Arthur Charpentier. Keep up the wonderful work!
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Tasha Lewis, thank you for your high rating!
Robin Gregory, thank you for your help and support!
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Jim Boston, thank you for your high rating!
Efrain Perez, thank you for your high rating!
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