Only question I have that may make me more likely to view it is to know something about the "man". What is his job, is he old or young, married, divorced. Something to tease me while only adding in two or three descriptors. When a well to do accountant has a vivid dream that he will die in thirty days...
James is right. But also I'd delete the "He's not sure" words. Use a direct word and lose the ellipsis. Will acting on his premonition prevent his fate or cause it?
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Only question I have that may make me more likely to view it is to know something about the "man". What is his job, is he old or young, married, divorced. Something to tease me while only adding in two or three descriptors. When a well to do accountant has a vivid dream that he will die in thirty days...
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James is right. But also I'd delete the "He's not sure" words. Use a direct word and lose the ellipsis. Will acting on his premonition prevent his fate or cause it?
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