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"After revealing her powers to herself and the world, a promising lawyer is forced to join a hero agency to control her abilities and regain her freedom. Meanwhile, after a new law approval, a retired hero turns against the society that abandoned him".
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In a world where heroes and villains exist, Helen Pierce passes the bar exam, becoming a lawyer. To celebrate, she goes out with her girlfriend Viola, during the H-Day, a date to remind people the importance of controlling all superior abilities. During their date, a new law is approved, where retired heroes losses their pension in favor of impulsing new programs for the new generation. This causes an attack near her by a former and known hero. While they try to escape, Viola is put in danger by a car going directing at her. Helen stops the car, revealing her powers to herself and the entire world. The next day, she receives an invitation to work at the rescue agency, Hero Inc. She rejects the invitation but soon realizes that she won't be able to study law or go to public places until she works for a year. After meeting the agency director, she agrees to become a hero just to restore her freedom. Meanwhile, a retired hero suffers the effects of the new law and after his wife gets worse, he decides to go against the system, becoming an experienced and powerful villain on its own.
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It’s like there are two things going on here.. a “she” and a “him”. So we need to distinguish who the story is mostly about or clearly explain how they interrelate (if needed). Also, it seems that there is an intriguing undercurrent of story here. Is it ILLEGAL to have superpowers? Like in the X-Men, they hunt down "mutants"? Is this why the female lawyer is "forced to join a hero agency to control her abilities"? This needs a little work shopping to be honest. Perhaps this idea can provide a tid-bit of inspiration for you as you think this one out? "In a world where superpowers are outlawed, a promising lawyer is forced into an interment camp designed to subdue her extraordinary abilities. She must ally with a retired hero to escape and save the world from destruction."
Hi Derek! Thank you so much for your feedback. That is correct, I want to build the world from 2 different perspectives, from one young woman that is forced to work as a hero to regain her freedom and an old man forced to become something he is not after the entire world forget about him. I would definitely agree with you...if this was a screenplay project, but since I see it as a TV pilot, I have more room to develop the narrative. But hey, your idea sounds awesome for a season! Thanks for taking the time to read it, I'll keep improving this story and myself. Cheers!