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After surviving decades of warped sexual abuse, interfamilial sex trafficking, and being forced to be her dying dad's primary caregiver as a child, and an oppressive, exploitative marriage as an adult, a half-Vietnamese suburban mom and health and fitness enthusiast with undiagnosed language processing disabilities and C-PTSD discovers more and more about her invisible disabilities as she attempts online dating after her separation.
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Lucinda, this looks like a very complex, meaningful story. It's getting lost in the run-on sentence. Try really boiling down to the basics. Start with a logline template perhaps, and tweak from there if need be. A good one to use is "When [INCITING INCIDENT OCCURS], a [SPECIFIC PROTAGONIST] must [OBJECTIVE], or else [STAKES]."
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Thank you for your input!!