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A black widow story set in the high-stakes world of yachting and pirates, with a unique team of a seasoned detective and a schizophrenic bodyguard one step behind the villainous siren, PIRATESSA.
SYNOPSIS:
Wealthy and lonely millionaire, Jim Blair is dazzled by Lesley’s sexy sweet smile… he coaxes her onto his yacht for a weekend getaway to explore the coast of Costa Rica.
They disappear.
Don Cummings, PI extraordinaire, takes the case. He teams up with a Costa Rican bodyguard, Craig Lundvall. Don is methodical. Craig is paranoid. It will take both to stop the series of disappearances that follow.
A black widow story set in the high-stakes world of yachting and billionaire playboys, PIRATESSA is a detective story of intrigue and lust. It is also a subtle love story, as Craig must choose between the voices in his head and the voice of the woman he loves.
PIRATESSA is a completed, feature-length, high-concept, female-driven script with a unique and original story concept. The female lead is the villain, and is unique in her chameleon style seductions and her cagey intelligence. She is very difficult to trap. The script is contemporary and stands out for its exotic marinas from Costa Rica to Italy.
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This script has what it takes to get to the next level! Moves along sweetly and with intrigue! Unique character portrayals in very appealing settings and plenty of psyco-drama!
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OMG!!! This is a terrific story. I can certainly learn a lot about the Craft of Screenwriting from your style. I'd definitely pay $15,00 at my local Cineplex to see this! Thanks, wgunn1953@outlook.com
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Wow, "Piratessa" sounds exciting and really unique, Heidi Schussman! I can picture this on a major channel, network, or streamer. The title will really catch people's eyes. I can see the movie as a TV series as well.
I think you could explain what the Piratessa is in the logline. Example: "one step behind a ______ (adjective) yacht called the PIRATESSA."
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Maurice, The Piratessa is the villain, not the yacht. Should I say; "behind the villainous siren, Piratessa"?
Oh ok, Heidi Schussman. Yes, I think you should say ""behind the villainous siren, Piratessa."
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Thanks Maurice!
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I love it! There is adventure, strong characters, it is very different from what we are used to see
You're welcome, Heidi Schussman.
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