THE STAGE 32 LOGLINES
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7 MINUTES AND ABOUT 20 SECONDS
By Mar B. Alves
A pair of teenagers rocked by the trauma of seeing someone they loved murdered during a school shooting cope in wildly different ways, trying to navigate the enmity that existed before the killing.
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Pretty good log-line, Marina. Clear main story thread, but the main concern here for me is the indistinct stakes. What if they don't come together? What is at stake for the two survivors? Why do we care? If you can communicate this it will help.
Thank you, Phil! Sorry I'm only replying now, somehow I didn't see this... Thanks for the help! I changed it up a little!